Worried Little Blossoms

Blossoms in the trees,
Worried their color too dim,
Stretch out for more light.


Technically not a Haiku due to the personification, though it is in the traditional Haiku 5-7-5 line format. Thanks!









































Written 11 April 2016 at Camp Casey, Republic of Korea

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Susan Palli

Date: 1/3/2017 9:54:00 AM

I like this one a lot!

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper
Date: 3/19/2017 10:10:00 PM

Thanks Susan...and thanks so much for reading...my apologies for my lateness here... MC

Kelly Deschler

Date: 12/6/2016 9:18:00 PM

What lovely images you create in this poem... Very nice work, MC!

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper
Date: 3/19/2017 10:08:00 PM

Awww thanks Kelly...sorry for the delay in my reply...trying to retire from the Army is a lot harder than it should be LOL! MC

Becca Teagan

Date: 10/18/2016 8:43:00 AM

Hi MC... I saw a comment you wrote on a poem, so I wanted to visit.. I'm glad I did, I love the imagery in this and it's ok that it is personification :) You are an amazing writer and I'm so glad to see you here posting again. Big hugs, friend x

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper
Date: 5/2/2018 7:43:00 PM

Becca my friend....I thought I replied to you... I was leaving Korea around this time, so I missed you here. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Sorry for not replying sooner! MC

Len Gasun

Date: 10/16/2016 6:14:00 AM

Wow! This is such a dazzling verse with dazzling imagery my dear friend, MC. It's indeed cool sometimes to write a poem about the beautiful places we've visited. I've just came back from Korea and I saw what you've exactly described in your beautiful poem! Great Job! May I keep this gem as souvenir pls? Thank you so much! love and hug, Leonora

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper
Date: 10/17/2016 7:34:00 AM

Absolutely! You were here in Korea and didn't visit....shame! LOL! Thanks so much reading and commenting, much appreciated! PS Sent you a Soup mail... MC

Paloma P

Date: 10/14/2016 9:34:00 AM

Now you're cooking with fire MC! Like your pretty posies. :)

Paloma P
Date: 10/14/2016 1:24:00 PM

I wasn't aware of that either, better luck next time, third time's a charm they say! :) I still think it's uber lovely.

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper
Date: 10/14/2016 10:40:00 AM

Awww, thanks...wrote this back in the spring when the cherry blossoms here in Korea were in full bloom...pretty. Though Paul made an excellent point below...so I will have to make that correction...but I'm getting closer! Thanks for all your support Paloma! MC

Paul Callus

Date: 10/14/2016 7:59:00 AM

Hi MC...this is more of a haiku than the first one, which I would have put as a Senryu. I like the image which you present here, but allow me to point out that haiku does not permit personification, so blossoms can't be 'worried'. Regards // paul

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper
Date: 10/14/2016 10:45:00 AM

Excellent point Paul my friend! Great critique...very helpful. So this is probably another Senryu perhaps? Maybe we can chat about it sometime. Anyway, thanks so much for the read and your helpful comment! MC