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Woman In Black: Hears the Rooks Cawing

hears the rooks cawing
as he strolls through the grave yard - -
sees her watching him

* for Andrea's (and Nikko's) contest

The Woman in Black is a book and a film - a big buck version is currently being filmed, I've heard

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Poet Destroyer A

March 2, 2012 at 9:42 PM

JAKE..READING UP ON SOME OLD CONTEST* CONGRATULATIONS~ WITH YOUR AWESOME WIN! ;-)*always..pd

Debbie Guzzi

January 16, 2012 at 5:48 AM

Jack .. you can simplify..you do not need the word hears, you have sited a sound the sound of cawing. You don't want so many verbs in a haiku it is a verse meant to 'invite' the reader into a momentary sensory experience of a writer, one moment 1 action [if possible..but not 3 actions] cawing, strolling, watching...decide the subject the bird or the man. Best not to use pronouns disconnected from their nouns [I believe the 'she' is the rook? If it's a woman I think you are just trying to get too much in one haiku. [rooks, a man, and a woman?] Light & Love

Andrea Dietrich

January 9, 2012 at 8:36 PM

sorry for the late congrats for my own contest. haha. I LOVE yours. well, I loved all of them, even the ones that didn't make my list were so fun to read and made me remember many great movies. This one I can't recall. I sure hope to see it!!

Carol Sunshine Brown

January 9, 2012 at 7:13 AM

Congratulations on your win in Andrea's "Movie Senryu" contest Jack. Love, Carol

Audrey Haick

January 7, 2012 at 2:04 PM

I'd like to see this, Jack. Who's the author of the book? Congratulations on your top win in the contest! Love, Annalise

Sara Kendrick

January 7, 2012 at 1:33 PM

Congrats on your winning entry..Sara

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

January 7, 2012 at 12:13 PM

I haven't read this book, but you sure piqued my curiosity with this one, Jack! Sounds very ominous and I really enjoyed this....congrats on your win!! ;D

Gwendolen Song

January 7, 2012 at 3:38 AM

Hi there, Jack. This sounds like a creeepy movie. I bet you are a scary movie kind a guy! Congrats on this win. A very competitive contest. Gwendolen

Anne-Lise Andresen

December 30, 2011 at 2:43 AM

Smile...bauti....I like it Jack. HAPPY NEW YEAR TO YOU. OXOX hugs from Anne-Lise

M.I.A .

December 29, 2011 at 8:14 PM

wow, gotta try to see this then. you captured the scene wonderfully. good luck on the contest n wishing you a great happy new year jack

Sara Kendrick

December 29, 2011 at 3:38 PM

Interesting film I bet..Good luck..Reads like a winner..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Russell Sivey

December 29, 2011 at 2:26 PM

Hey Jack, I've see woman in red but I've never seen woman in black! Who's in the movie? Yet I envisioned that scene you described for us to visualize! This is a wonderful entry into Andrea's contest! Great Work!!

Russell Sivey

December 29, 2011 at 2:27 PM

Is it "Lady in red"?