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woman in black: hears the rooks cawing

hears the rooks cawing
as he strolls through the grave yard - -
sees her watching him

* for Andrea's (and Nikko's) contest

The Woman in Black is a book and a film - a big buck version is currently being filmed, I've heard

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Date: 3/2/2012 9:42:00 PM
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Date: 1/16/2012 5:48:00 AM
Jack .. you can do not need the word hears, you have sited a sound the sound of cawing. You don't want so many verbs in a haiku it is a verse meant to 'invite' the reader into a momentary sensory experience of a writer, one moment 1 action [if possible..but not 3 actions] cawing, strolling, watching...decide the subject the bird or the man. Best not to use pronouns disconnected from their nouns [I believe the 'she' is the rook? If it's a woman I think you are just trying to get too much in one haiku. [rooks, a man, and a woman?] Light & Love
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Date: 1/9/2012 8:36:00 PM
sorry for the late congrats for my own contest. haha. I LOVE yours. well, I loved all of them, even the ones that didn't make my list were so fun to read and made me remember many great movies. This one I can't recall. I sure hope to see it!!
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Date: 1/9/2012 7:13:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Andrea's "Movie Senryu" contest Jack. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/7/2012 2:04:00 PM
I'd like to see this, Jack. Who's the author of the book? Congratulations on your top win in the contest! Love, Annalise
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Date: 1/7/2012 1:33:00 PM
Congrats on your winning entry..Sara
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Date: 1/7/2012 12:13:00 PM
I haven't read this book, but you sure piqued my curiosity with this one, Jack! Sounds very ominous and I really enjoyed this....congrats on your win!! ;D
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Date: 1/7/2012 3:38:00 AM
Hi there, Jack. This sounds like a creeepy movie. I bet you are a scary movie kind a guy! Congrats on this win. A very competitive contest. Gwendolen
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Date: 12/30/2011 2:43:00 AM
Smile...bauti....I like it Jack. HAPPY NEW YEAR TO YOU. OXOX hugs from Anne-Lise
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Date: 12/29/2011 8:14:00 PM
wow, gotta try to see this then. you captured the scene wonderfully. good luck on the contest n wishing you a great happy new year jack
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Date: 12/29/2011 3:38:00 PM
Interesting film I bet..Good luck..Reads like a winner..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 12/29/2011 2:26:00 PM
Hey Jack, I've see woman in red but I've never seen woman in black! Who's in the movie? Yet I envisioned that scene you described for us to visualize! This is a wonderful entry into Andrea's contest! Great Work!!
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Russell Sivey
Date: 12/29/2011 2:27:00 PM
Is it "Lady in red"?
Date: 12/29/2011 2:13:00 PM
I like the imagery, what movie is it from?~Tirzah~
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