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The sun descended and his heart grew cold. There were no sympathy cards to unfold. Vacancy held a former lover's face. A funeral's closure never took place. Rapidly released from my hopeless clutch were his voice of promise and tender touch. No longer would his mighty hand hold mine. Never would we create a new bloodline. His body was cast into the unknown, severed from my sight, while inside I'd groan. Shunned by his family, I would lament, losing his friends also without intent. Contemptuous slurs and degradations replaced needs for hugs and consolations. Every edge we trekked, did grief not matter without cremated remains to scatter? 4-16-2021 Rhyming Couplets Poetry Contest Sponsor: Janice Canerdy

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Tony Hargreaves

Date: 5/13/2021 9:18:00 AM

Hi Juliet Loved your rhyming couplet. Lots of feeling expressed. Thanks for sharing this. Best wishes.

Beata Agustin

Date: 4/20/2021 2:41:00 AM

Congrats! Thanks for sharing this sad reality in your awesome rhyming style. God bless you.

Juliet Ligon
Date: 4/20/2021 8:11:00 AM

Thanks, Beata. This was inspired by real life long ago. It was the toughest thing I had to go through, clinging on to false hope. At the time I thought his death would have been easier. I am so thankful that shortly after praying for release (after grieving many years), God has blessed my heart and given me a loving family. After going through an old notebook the memory was sparked.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 4/19/2021 12:21:00 PM

Juliet, this sad poem of grieving is heart wrenching. The lost chance to say good bye will always be remembered like unscattered (sp) ashes. Congratulations on your eloquent poem. Sending you blessings.

Juliet Ligon
Date: 4/19/2021 8:02:00 PM

Thanks, Sam. I appreciate your comments. I found something sloppy that I wrote many years back and reframed it. The thought was that losing a boyfriend was like death without the sympathies of a funeral and becoming estranged to those connected with him as well.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 4/19/2021 9:17:00 AM

Juliet, a huge CONGRATS on your well-deserved win in my contest! Janice

Juliet Ligon
Date: 4/19/2021 7:55:00 PM

Thanks so much, Janice! The placement was a surprise to me.