With You

Can't get to sleep at night, not knowing if she is in your arms, knowing you should be holding me. Hard for me to start the day, what I thought we had just fades away. I wish I could make you love me, I have no use, my heart can't keep trying. Too much pain, so many tears... I am the one who should be there...with you.

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Black Eyed Susan

Date: 4/17/2011 3:57:00 PM

The pain of wanting someone and not being able to have them sucks. I think you should expand on this - what makes this situation unique? What did it feel like knowing she was w/someone else? What was your love like? Why did it end? What was it like starting the day besides "hard?" Maybe compare it to something. I think there's a lot of potential here for an even better poem.