Wishes

he blows out candles
wishes are a boy's laughter
his face is my smile

across the ocean
a boy falls asleep hungry
no birthday wishes

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/28/2012 9:28:00 PM

this is just fantastic, Rhonda. after seeing so many like this, I realize I will be lucky if I make it on that particular winners' list.

Harry Horsman

Date: 8/28/2012 9:20:00 AM

Two sides of the story here, wonderful how you did this, Rhonda

Karen Croft

Date: 8/27/2012 5:40:00 PM

this is sad, but out there it is true

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/27/2012 1:31:00 PM

Society can be tiring. Happy birthday sleeping boy.Very cute poem Rhonda, love it !!!! - oxox love Anne-Lise :)

Cory Long

Date: 8/27/2012 12:40:00 PM

this was wonderful.. I agree with russell you did a good job going from happy to sad.. good luck in the contest cory

Russell Sivey

Date: 8/27/2012 11:33:00 AM

This is a perfect entry into Michael's contest Rhonda! I really enjoyed the dramatic change from happiness to sadness between just two short Senryu! You've done masterfully with this form and subject matter my friend! Awesome piece here, Great Work!!