Wishes

he blows out candles wishes are a boy's laughter his face is my smile across the ocean a boy falls asleep hungry no birthday wishes
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Dietrich Avatar
August 28, 2012 at 9:28 PM
this is just fantastic, Rhonda. after seeing so many like this, I realize I will be lucky if I make it on that particular winners' list.
Horsman Avatar
August 28, 2012 at 9:20 AM
Two sides of the story here, wonderful how you did this, Rhonda
Croft Avatar
August 27, 2012 at 5:40 PM
this is sad, but out there it is true
Andresen Avatar
August 27, 2012 at 1:31 PM
Society can be tiring. Happy birthday sleeping boy.Very cute poem Rhonda, love it !!!! - oxox love Anne-Lise :)
Long Avatar
August 27, 2012 at 12:40 PM
this was wonderful.. I agree with russell you did a good job going from happy to sad.. good luck in the contest cory
Sivey Avatar
August 27, 2012 at 11:33 AM
This is a perfect entry into Michael's contest Rhonda! I really enjoyed the dramatic change from happiness to sadness between just two short Senryu! You've done masterfully with this form and subject matter my friend! Awesome piece here, Great Work!!
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