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after George Dunlop Leslie's Winter Walk

I think this is the best of my rhyme poems and the most heartfelt.

Winter Learning Ducks

Afternoons the sky shuts down around the swamp's warning tapes
propped up with restoration piping and dirt leak fencing.
We’re fleeing toward the wild, seeking the names and shapes, 
the same way the Cedar Waxwing flit and grip for berries tree to tree.

Canada Geese are easy, they lead off down the lane leaving residue,
Widgeons have green stripes and gold stripes, one American 
the other European, and they’re all mumbling our family phew-do
they didn’t burn the kid, they can’t keep the house clean, drugs…

Blink away the cold wind tears. Forget all that, only remember
Shovelers have the long low profile and the long bill from studies
in New Zealand, like a deep breath, we set aside work, unlimber
spy the race of killdeer away from their guarding territory in gravel.

Our boss didn’t try to replace us, he ducked out to a new job
leaving the crime ringing in our ears like the police car roaring past.
Head down, we tunnel under the high way finding the dunk and bob
of mergansers and their hallowed or red heads,

remarking differences when the sudden scream of honking
mallards flee up river. Caught off guard, we wonder did we cause
all this pain? The rise and dunk flying goldfinch happily chirping
cling to the thistle, their favorite waste near the waste water

ponds where all the Black River water flows for cleaning
spilling into the nesting lower stages of the tertiary treatment.
That’s all this is, treatment for the shock wave week riding
current events on our shoulders, almost like the red-tailed hawk

that screams and skims our head, rising up to the setting sun 
turning the sky purple and pink and bruised. That’s when wood
ducks skim into view, our breath captured and then steaming undone
but soon the heavens offer confirmation, blue angels
with their huge oversized wings soar in pairs down as gift.
We hold each other then, let screams silence, detail enriched.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Phillips Avatar
February 2, 2014 at 11:59 AM
A nice poem with excellent metaphoric expressions..
Thirtyseven Avatar
January 21, 2014 at 9:41 PM
So much knowledge there about ducks. A very interesting write. Thanks also for my placing in your competition, it was just luck that I had recently written what you were looking for. Thanks again.
Harper Avatar
January 23, 2014 at 3:13 PM
Thanks Scott
Dunn Avatar
January 19, 2014 at 8:04 PM
DUCKIE THIS IS A FUNNY AND WONDERFUL WRITE NO QUAKES ABOUT IT THANKS FOR MAKING ME LOL TONIGHT. CHERI
Harper Avatar
January 23, 2014 at 3:14 PM
Thanks very much Cheryl
Lamoureux Avatar
January 19, 2014 at 12:33 PM
Who would have though Ducks could provide such inspiration. A magnificent use of metaphor and poetic language. Well done!
Lamoureux Avatar
January 19, 2014 at 4:14 PM
Birds are worthy of the attention.
Harper Avatar
January 19, 2014 at 3:55 PM
Richard, thank you, us avid birders never shut up about birds, lol, I'm glad you appreciated it.
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