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Winter Dorian 42 Style

Winter is the time of year
ice prevails before the sun,
not at all when people should
try out races now begun.
Extol virtues of nature,
run, life's race must now be run

Dorian,
In your poem Summer you disallowed comment so no one could mention the second line is grammatically incorrect. It should read..
Umm, temperature just soars! 
or
Umm, temperatures just soar!

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Keith Logan

Date: 10/20/2016 4:26:00 AM

Hello Dorian, with the poem below you once again turned off comments. I assume eight by four refers to eight lines by four syllables. The eight lines part is OK but a number of those lines have five syllables. Apollo And Daphne - The Eight By Four Style.

Keith Logan

Date: 9/29/2016 10:56:00 PM

Andrea, I wrote this simply to gain Dorian's attention, that is why I included her name in the title. I read her poem Summer and enjoyed it but felt I must point out a grammatical problem in the poem due to an extra "s" that really aught not to be there. I could not respond on the poem as she had turned off comments, something I can't imagine ever doing.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/29/2016 8:39:00 PM

what is all that about to Dorian?? WEll, to get back to your poem.I enjoyed it though I don't know what the Dorian thing is about. FRankly, I don't like winter, and I agree life's race must be run NOW. Always now!

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/29/2016 4:10:00 PM

Hi Keith, I really enjoyed reading this poem. Good imagery as well. Futhermore, I would like to extend you a friendly welcome to poetry soup. It's a place to learn and grow from other poets like you. It's also a place to meet new friends. Thanks for stopping by my page:-) Alexis

Keith Logan
Date: 9/29/2016 10:49:00 PM