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Why She Refused His Kiss

He drew her close and tried to paint a kiss on her soft cheek, angrily she refused,freed herself and closed the door on his face, her choked voice came from inside,'Where's my choco you promised, Dad?' =======================000===========================

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Dinda Minardi

Date: 2/13/2012 9:48:00 AM

hahaha, a kid's think, huh. As simple as that :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/11/2012 12:43:00 AM

looks like i never congratulated you here, Kash. well, I will wait no longer for my superstitious reasons. haha. I entered one contest with a mediocre number but refuse to enter the other one until a much better number appears!! Goodnight my friend and thanks so much for bringing that one line to my attention. Your sijo at least deserved to win. I was awesome.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/3/2012 3:37:00 AM

ahahhhaa, kashi buddy... a promise to a kid cannot be broken.. so where's my candy??... greatt approach on the element of surprise.. winning huggs!.. come visit! :)

Dalila Agtani

Date: 2/3/2012 1:10:00 AM

The last line made me smile kash! Thanks for sharing. Dalila

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/2/2012 9:55:00 PM

Kash... if this is for the contest... good luck... enjoyed..pd

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 2/2/2012 9:29:00 PM

oh so very cute with emotion Kash.. good luck in the contest luv.. very visual ...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/2/2012 9:23:00 PM

hahaha, So cool, Kash. VEry clever entry for the kiss contest!! I could almost picture you having a little girl, but you have only the son, right?

Glenn Sentes

Date: 2/2/2012 8:03:00 PM

i was surprised by your ending! Lurrrvvv it! =) Good luck! This certainly will make it though! And thannks btw for your kind comment on my winning Sijo! More power!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/2/2012 6:25:00 PM

Precious!! nothing like a Dad's love for his girl and visa versa! Light & Love

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 2/2/2012 3:50:00 PM

Wonderful read!! I love the twist! Blessings, Rhonda

George Aul

Date: 2/2/2012 1:27:00 PM

Nicely done.........George

Jack Horne

Date: 2/2/2012 1:05:00 PM

LOL, good one, Kash. Many congrats on your wins : )

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/2/2012 12:22:00 PM

That is a very different one for sure..Sad to me..If for a contest, reads like a winner..Soup mail soon..Sara

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 2/2/2012 11:00:00 AM

Ah, so did I get it right, it's his daughter after all? Very nice twist, since at first I thought it was between lovers-- Can I also suggest something, kash? I think it would help if you put a comma after the word "promised" to indicate a pause and that she was talking to her dad-- since without it, I read it as the chocolate was for the dad-- sorry, am I being weird? Just a suggestion :D

Bob Quigley

Date: 2/2/2012 10:37:00 AM

A real twist to this one Kash. Well done