Brenda Chiri Poet Rhyme

Whom I Seek

Up above in my starlit skies
I wonder where my life went wrong
These thoughts all bring tears to my eyes
I can't be weak,I must stay strong

If heaven ever lost its shine
if my star ever lost its light
need to know you would still be mine
And that for me would you still fight

A smile no longer on my face
Forever would you hold my hand
And tell me that I can't be replaced
Honestly would you understand

These are all things I need to know 
making my struggles not seem weak
I need someone who wants to grow
Are you the person whom I seek

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Richard Lamoureux August 4, 2019 at 9:12 AM Congrats Brenda, this piece is in the top 100 new poems. I can see why. Hugs Rick. Brenda Chiri August 4, 2019 at 9:32 AM Thank you Rick! I guess I wouldn't even have guessed it was good enough for that! I appreciate you letting me know!;)

Wendy Watson July 21, 2019 at 2:35 AM I enjoyed reading this plea for assurance in love,Brenda. I think that Nick is referring to the last line where you missed out 'you'. Might I humbly suggest also that you capitalize the last 'I' in verse one and personally I would add an 'I' before 'need to know' but that's just my preference. A heartfelt poem,Brenda. Brenda Chiri July 21, 2019 at 1:24 PM Thank you so much for clarifying that Wendy I do appreciate that and your comment!;)

Nick Trim July 12, 2019 at 7:16 PM you left a word out you donut, lol, apart from that blunder you wrote a wonder under the starlit skies with the twinkle twinkle up so high, looking down on you getting high, saying why Brenda why lol I like this one puppet Brenda Chiri July 13, 2019 at 1:08 AM Now whAt word did I leave out mr trim? Hahaha!your just silly don't make me have to crush ya! Lmao! Thanks nick!;)

John Fleming July 12, 2019 at 11:08 AM As always, rhymes beautifully of course...a worthy little poem, mistress Poetess. Lots of affection! :) john Brenda Chiri July 12, 2019 at 1:18 PM Ahhh thank you John! I'm so happy you liked it!;) All my affection!;)

Heidi Sands July 10, 2019 at 6:11 PM Clearly written Brenda and smooth rhyming :) Brenda Chiri July 10, 2019 at 7:29 PM Lol thank you Heidi!;)