Who are we at our core

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‘written 24/Dec/2023

Who are we at our core’ poetry contest
unseeking seeker sponsored

 

 

our existence is a mirage of perception,
a play of senses on the centre of neurones,
darkness and morning are concepts of deception,
two simple shades amongst myriads of tones.

our consciousness is self trapped in a body cage,
with name, an identity, ego of its own,
cage of flesh and bones that are slave to time, and age,
ethereal consciousness, its age is unknown.

far beyond reach of human existence and thought,
boundless beyond the farthest points of creation,
is essence of reality sages have sought,
where truth merges to seek one supreme relation!

the supreme is ocean of serene existence,
unbounded by limits of physical being,
that requires no consumption for its subsistence,
when merged with this eternal truth, there’s no dying!

each life that we know has its three journeys of flow,
the physical being that goes from womb to grave,
intellect from ignorance to knowledge aglow,
and journey of the spirit to free us and save!

12 syllables each line
abab rhyme
Line of inquiry:
 
“we look for that that does not come and go

it cannot be organic form, subject to decay 

thoughts and beliefs are fickle, how little we know

yet come what may, our inner child continues to play”

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023



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Date: 12/30/2023 10:25:00 AM
This was written so well on the theme.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 12/30/2023 12:27:00 PM
Thanks Silent one! Yes, a lot of my own views on life there. I loved your concept!! well done!
Date: 12/27/2023 5:33:00 PM
Deep thoughts reflected in your poem, Krish. Really serious question - who are we at our core? Enjoyed all lines, especially the last stanza.
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 12/27/2023 7:04:00 PM
Thanks Mala! We are all seekers trying to figure out our relationship with the universe, and this is passed on to us from great sages of our land!! Good to hear from you.
Date: 12/24/2023 11:38:00 AM
Great poem Krish which is perfect for the theme, but he wanted the title to be same as the contest title and as of poetry soup rules we cannot include the contest name, sponsor or date in the actual poem.. You can write them in your notes.. Take care.
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Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 12/24/2023 11:53:00 AM
Thanks Silent One. Thanks for your valuable tip. I have now removed them.
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