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White Feathered Fowl

white feathered fowl
slathered in black slimy crude
let their cry be ours . . .


For "OIL SPILLED OUT ANGER! /Slam Contest by SKAT*

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Joseph May

June 4, 2017 at 7:14 PM

Oil spills are such an ecological disaster, Great haiku Connie

Michael Smith

March 29, 2012 at 5:36 PM

I'm not a fan but stopped to read this because I liked the title. It reminded me of a poem I wrote called Feather Beauty Bright. I understand the reasoning of wanting to conform to someone elses poetic form.

Poet Destroyer A

December 25, 2011 at 11:05 PM

Connie, nice.. and tough, thank you for sharing.. May the magic of writing fill your days here on the soup. May all your dreams come true this holiday season. I hope you are enjoying the blessings that Christmas brings.. filling our hearts with hope and joy, just take care of yourself... once again enjoyed your poem,,always,..p.d.

Andrea Dietrich

September 27, 2011 at 12:30 AM

I was reviewing this one and noticing how it never even scored.That's too bad. It deserved a win. glad you liked my sonnet on the church, Connie. I wrote it in my church library this past sunday!!

Wilma Neels

September 6, 2010 at 6:41 PM

Connie you captured the essence of despair in your haiku, enjoyed it.. Dankie :) Wilma

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

August 20, 2010 at 1:18 AM

Let their cries be indeed ours-- in 3 lines you've captured so much with this, Connie...hugs nikko :)

Cecil Hickman

August 13, 2010 at 9:00 PM

such a wonderful Haiku of a sad situation for sure,,wishing you all the best,,and thank You for visiting my words and leaving yours behind.,,Blessings..cecil

Brandee Augustus

August 13, 2010 at 5:56 PM

Very nicely written and completly concise. I got the passion without to many angry words. I also wanted to thank you for noticing that my poem "Stepping Outside" was a different form then what I put down. Thanks again for the observation.

Charles Henderson

August 7, 2010 at 8:16 PM

slathered ---I like that. Very descriptive. Good work on a dirty subject. Charles

Daniel Cwiak

August 5, 2010 at 4:42 AM

Beautifully done and to the point! Great write. Good luck in the contest. Dan C ps. Thanks for your comments on my work.

David Byrne

August 4, 2010 at 7:14 PM

well said Connie!

Andrea Dietrich

August 4, 2010 at 5:20 PM

I hope you win, Connie. YOu did great with this one!! Luv, Andrea

Matthew Anish

August 4, 2010 at 1:02 PM

What terrible scenes we see on our screens! Your haiku hits the mark! Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Carolyn Devonshire

August 4, 2010 at 10:08 AM

Your poem gave me chills, literally goosebumps on my arms and legs. Very powerful haiku! Love, Carolyn

Sara Kendrick

August 4, 2010 at 4:01 AM

We all feel the same way..Good luck in the contest with this excellent short write that expresses so much..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

August 3, 2010 at 7:30 PM

Saying its fixed on TV is a joke ..how do u fix the loss and the devastation and the poor wildlife and sea creatures .. Connie your Haiku is brilliant to this travesty of greedy corporation and government... I have written a few myself on this subject so harsh to swallow... still so fresh in the mind... now the seafood is all tainted for restarant consumption as well.. luv.. wonderful words..my friend.. with luv..