Debbie Duncan Poet Couplet

White Birch

White-covered ground.
 Frozen all around.

Twenty feet tall white birch trees.
The only snow I see all around.

Yes, that's where he took me.
I begged as he said get down.

Get down on your knees.
I said please, I'm begging you, please.

He said I'm doing it to you.
What they done to me.

There I lay watching my spirit fly away.  
As he just walked away.



Watching Fargo 
 11/ 23 /  2015  Monday  10: 55pm

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Michael Ainsley September 7, 2016 at 10:23 PM I am overwhelmed with a dark empathetic shadow of sorrow.I was cornered in a tent when I was eight by an adult.I am so sorry you had this terrible event in your life.I know words don't always help.But always remember you did nothing wrong. I wish you light Debbie,always more light;Thalia. Michael Ainsley September 7, 2016 at 10:32 PM maybe I misunderstood,I sometimes watch shows that remind me of things that have really happened.I hope this never did! Tha.lia

Duncan Chappell April 22, 2016 at 3:28 PM Very nice indeed lots love

Andrea Dietrich March 5, 2016 at 6:35 PM Seeing this one again, I really love it.

White Sage February 22, 2016 at 4:16 PM nice couplets there Debbie...well written sets

Duke Beaufort January 28, 2016 at 8:46 AM There are also beautiful people who would have you soar and watch in awe. The sad thing is when you find yourself in the wrong place at the wrong time. May that please not happen to us!!

Joe Maverick January 16, 2016 at 12:52 PM Strong imagery on a testing picture you have displayed Debbie, its interesting how many different motives there are that cause inspiration.'

Eve Roper January 8, 2016 at 8:28 PM I love the couplet, you did have me wondering a 7. Frago was a strange movie.

Duke Beaufort December 31, 2015 at 8:28 PM Fargo is a tough watch. It's about the worst kind of human behavior and it also is a commentary on the business system we have and what happens when there is no immediate gratification. You elevate it to generational injustice.

Sara Kendrick December 31, 2015 at 2:21 PM This one got my attention..It is very emotive and expresses like the person had experienced the act themself..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Poet Destroyer A December 30, 2015 at 2:58 PM Debbie.. Happy New Years... Always ~LINDA~

Paul Callus December 29, 2015 at 7:01 AM A lovely write, Debbie, even if it deals with a negative situation. ~ Hope you're keeping well. ~ Regards //paul

Anne-Lise Andresen December 29, 2015 at 2:48 AM - Dear Debbie :) - Happy New Year !!!! - hugs from Norway // Anne-Lise :)

Andrea Dietrich November 30, 2015 at 3:43 PM You said "drove away" but actually walked away works great. He DID walk away first, before he drove away!!(that silly girl was just asking for it in the Fargo show!!)

Anne-Lise Andresen November 30, 2015 at 3:18 AM - I do not know what / who Fargo is - But well written in fear, dear Debbie - (Tomorrow December 1st I will post a wonderful Christmas poem, hope you will enjoy it) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Poet Destroyer A November 29, 2015 at 9:40 PM Hi Debbie, on the bottom you added Watching Fargo, does that mean you are inspired? LINDA

Andrea Dietrich November 29, 2015 at 6:11 PM Hey, Debbie. I am watching FArgo too. You mean that cool drama that is on Fx or something? Is this where the girl gets killed in the snowy woods? I too like to write poems inspired by strong scenes in shows. Very nicely done.

Andrea Dietrich November 29, 2015 at 6:10 PM I can't find your spirit poem. You need to tell me its date posted. anyway, let me read this one!!

Daver Austin November 24, 2015 at 11:17 AM I wish you had tasered that guy, Debbie. Love, daver