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Where Commas Are Needed

you did not
Cupid shoot
an arrow and
as if planned
hit the bull's 
eye of my
heart

you didn't use
curare or any
poisonous
frog's blood
to drug or
make me
fall

in love
but now
my heart
burns with
an ache that
no remedy can
take you away or

ease relief
of acid
not a
flash
back
but like
anti acid

in an opposite
world where
Antacid Man
is a super
hero that
can
do

everything
i wouldn't
do such as
moving and
removing
twisting
and

turning that
which wasn't
shot in his
heart but
his foot
instead
puncturing

him to
mistakingly
not punctuate
"What's this thing
called 
love?"
but

"What's this
thing called love?"
never knowing
what i know
in my
opposite
universe

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 9/19/2019 9:00:00 PM
I like this. Reading you tonight, each piece a little rabbit hole. Spelunked.
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Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 9/20/2019 9:21:00 AM
Is now. ;D,
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Jeff Connelly
Date: 9/20/2019 9:03:00 AM
Hahaha Maureen thank you. Is "White Rabbit" playing in your head?

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