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When Winter Beckons

He shuffles along the leaf covered path slowly dragging in his wake the full weight of old age. ------------------------------------------- Contest: One Kimo Sponsor: Rick Parise Placed 2nd © 9th October, 2016

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Md Johnson

Date: 10/26/2017 11:16:00 AM

Just happened across this poignant gem. Such power in an economy of words.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/26/2017 12:21:00 PM

Many thanks for your heartening comments, MD. A boost to have you visiting. Regards // paul

John Michaels

Date: 4/15/2017 4:48:00 AM

Very profound piece, Paul. Am reminded a little of the "Riddle of the Sphinx" with winter paralleling the evening of life. Congratulations on your high-placement!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/15/2017 7:48:00 AM

Once again I thank you, John for your triple visit and the meaningful feedback. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/23/2016 2:10:00 PM

This Kimo speaks to a fear many have. Growing old seems scary because it is hard to do the simplest things as years fly by. If we're lucky, we have friends and family to help us drag "the full weight." Well said, Paul, and congratulations on your win

Paul Callus
Date: 10/24/2016 4:37:00 PM

I agree with you Carolyn; there is nothing worse than starting to feel helpless and useless...and then there is fear of dementia...that would really be the cherry on the cake! Till then, let's try and keep our mind active and occupied:) Hugs // paul

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/22/2016 4:34:00 PM

A very good poem, Paul. Kimo, eh. Very expressive and pointed. Nice imagery displayed. Love your work, friend. Much love to you and yours.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/23/2016 7:03:00 AM

Thank you Freddie; your feedback is truly appreciated. Have a nice day, my friend. Regards // paul

Casarah Nance

Date: 10/18/2016 5:06:00 PM

Grats on second place, this is a well thought out kimo, I like it!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/19/2016 4:00:00 PM

Thank you for the 'like', Casarah. You don't have much weight to carry...still very young:) Regards // paul

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe

Date: 10/16/2016 11:54:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement Paul - well written - very thoughtful - Old age is inevitable and the life we live adds to the burden we carry sometimes. Special day! Mark

Paul Callus
Date: 10/19/2016 3:58:00 PM

The more we live, the more weight we have to carry, I suppose:) Thank you for reading and commenting, MP. Regards // paul

John Lawless

Date: 10/16/2016 9:29:00 PM

...and only he knows why it weighs so much...Great job Paul, well deserved placement.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/19/2016 3:49:00 PM

Thank you, John. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2016 7:24:00 PM

I knew this would have to appear on the list and I'm so glad to see it HIGH. BIG congrats. I sure was surprised to win big too.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/19/2016 2:44:00 PM

You deserved your top placement, Andrea! Thank you for the faith you showed re my entry:) Regards // paul

Janis Thompson

Date: 10/16/2016 6:23:00 PM

Congratulations on your top placement. Lovely kimo.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/19/2016 2:41:00 PM

Thank you, Janis. Yours was also a worthy winner!

Lu Loo

Date: 10/16/2016 2:12:00 PM

wow Paul! this is perfect Kimo..I love this one dear man... Congrats on your placement! :)-luloo

Paul Callus
Date: 10/16/2016 2:28:00 PM

Yours is a lovely reaction, Laura:) So pleased that you liked it. Thank you:) ~ Regards // paul

Rick Parise

Date: 10/16/2016 1:42:00 PM

Beautiful.....Great Imagery!!! CONGRATS to YOU-Enjoyed

Paul Callus
Date: 10/16/2016 2:27:00 PM

Thank you very much, Rick. I never expected this high placing! It was a pleasure participating. Best regards // paul

Anu Nayak

Date: 10/16/2016 1:42:00 PM

Hearty congrats on your great win dear Paul, lovely imagery , can visualise the old man here in the leafy terrain,nicely penned kimo, enjoyed it!//love, Anu:)

Paul Callus
Date: 10/16/2016 2:25:00 PM

Thank you, Anu. I love your insightful feedback:) Regards /x/ paul

Hija De La Luna

Date: 10/13/2016 11:23:00 PM

I can feel the weight in your words. So few yet the impact is full! I am sure this will earn its rightful place in the contest!! Excellent, Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/14/2016 7:44:00 AM

Thank you for the insightful feedback, Hija...and for the faith you show in this Kimo:) Warm regards // paul

Sneha Rv

Date: 10/12/2016 10:06:00 AM

Ooh, this is so beautiful!! Such lovely metaphor :)) Hope this does very well in the contest!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/12/2016 1:53:00 PM

Many thanks, Sneha! Your visit and comments are truly appreciated:) All the best:) paul

Agnes Krampe

Date: 10/11/2016 8:55:00 PM

Great kimo, Paul. The form fits perfectly - one can feel the weight dragging as the lines get shorter. Good luck on the contest. Agnes

Paul Callus
Date: 10/12/2016 1:51:00 PM

Your feedback is a pleasure to read, Agnes! Thank you. Regards // paul

Tim Ryerson

Date: 10/11/2016 5:29:00 AM

Boy, I can identify with THIS Paul...VERY well done including a nice little twist at the end. Here in South Louisiana the summers are brutal and the winters are short but I find that the older I get the less I can tolerate either extreme...too hot or too cold. I see a sure winner here - Tim

Paul Callus
Date: 10/11/2016 11:57:00 AM

Thank you, Tim, for a pleasant visit and the positive feedback. Like you, I tend to feel heat and cold, much more than in my youth, when they had little effect on me! Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/11/2016 12:35:00 AM

very well done, Paul. I quite like this.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/11/2016 11:53:00 AM

I quite like it myself:) But I shouldn't be writing about old age...not at my age:) Regards // paul

Chris Hagy

Date: 10/10/2016 6:52:00 PM

This is a great write Paul, very effective!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/11/2016 11:15:00 AM

Thank you, Chris. Glad you like it. Regards // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/10/2016 9:25:00 AM

Hi Paul, You have penned a good Kimo. I agree with others it's good observation. I wish you the best in the contest:-) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 10/10/2016 11:36:00 AM

Thank you for your complimentary remarks, Alexis. Best regards // paul

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 10/10/2016 8:00:00 AM

Great vision, love the weight of this one.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/10/2016 11:34:00 AM

Thank you, Scott; a pleasure to have you stopping by. Regards // paul

Probir Gupta

Date: 10/10/2016 6:31:00 AM

Very aesthetic ...

Paul Callus
Date: 10/10/2016 10:25:00 AM

Hmmm "aesthetic"....now that sounds philosophical:) Thank you, Probir. Regards // paul

Paloma P

Date: 10/10/2016 5:47:00 AM

Profoundly effective in a few succinct lines.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/10/2016 10:14:00 AM

Thank you, Paloma; your input is appreciated. Regards // paul

Caycay Jennings

Date: 10/9/2016 11:04:00 PM

Truth spoken! My Mom is in a senior residence and I see this truth a great deal. It is a hard one to reconcile with ... CayCay

Paul Callus
Date: 10/10/2016 9:18:00 AM

Old age is not something to look forward to, CayCay, but it's a reality that can't be ignored! Thank you for reading and commenting. Regards // paul

Daniel Turner

Date: 10/9/2016 6:17:00 PM

A very wise observation, Paul I love it!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/10/2016 9:03:00 AM

Your nice feedback helps carry some of that weight, Daniel:) Thank you. Regards // paul

Tim Smith

Date: 10/9/2016 5:34:00 PM

This a tremendous piece Paul...three lines and it says it all

Paul Callus
Date: 10/10/2016 9:01:00 AM

I am pleased that you like it, Tim. Thank you. Regards // paul