Paul Callus Poet Kimo

When Winter Beckons

He shuffles along the leaf covered path

        slowly dragging in his wake   

          the full weight of old age.   


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              Contest: One Kimo
             Sponsor: Rick Parise
                    Placed 2nd

             © 9th October, 2016

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MD Johnson October 26, 2017 at 11:16 AM Just happened across this poignant gem. Such power in an economy of words. Paul Callus October 26, 2017 at 12:21 PM Many thanks for your heartening comments, MD. A boost to have you visiting. Regards // paul

John Michaels April 15, 2017 at 4:48 AM Very profound piece, Paul. Am reminded a little of the "Riddle of the Sphinx" with winter paralleling the evening of life. Congratulations on your high-placement! Paul Callus April 15, 2017 at 7:48 AM Once again I thank you, John for your triple visit and the meaningful feedback. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Carolyn Devonshire October 23, 2016 at 2:10 PM This Kimo speaks to a fear many have. Growing old seems scary because it is hard to do the simplest things as years fly by. If we're lucky, we have friends and family to help us drag "the full weight." Well said, Paul, and congratulations on your win Paul Callus October 24, 2016 at 4:37 PM I agree with you Carolyn; there is nothing worse than starting to feel helpless and useless...and then there is fear of dementia...that would really be the cherry on the cake! Till then, let's try and keep our mind active and occupied:) Hugs // paul

Freddie Robinson Jr. October 22, 2016 at 4:34 PM A very good poem, Paul. Kimo, eh. Very expressive and pointed. Nice imagery displayed. Love your work, friend. Much love to you and yours. Paul Callus October 23, 2016 at 7:03 AM Thank you Freddie; your feedback is truly appreciated. Have a nice day, my friend. Regards // paul

Casarah Nance October 18, 2016 at 5:06 PM Grats on second place, this is a well thought out kimo, I like it! Paul Callus October 19, 2016 at 4:00 PM Thank you for the 'like', Casarah. You don't have much weight to carry...still very young:) Regards // paul

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe October 16, 2016 at 11:54 PM Congratulations on your placement Paul - well written - very thoughtful - Old age is inevitable and the life we live adds to the burden we carry sometimes. Special day! Mark Paul Callus October 19, 2016 at 3:58 PM The more we live, the more weight we have to carry, I suppose:) Thank you for reading and commenting, MP. Regards // paul

John Lawless October 16, 2016 at 9:29 PM ...and only he knows why it weighs so much...Great job Paul, well deserved placement. Paul Callus October 19, 2016 at 3:49 PM Thank you, John. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich October 16, 2016 at 7:24 PM I knew this would have to appear on the list and I'm so glad to see it HIGH. BIG congrats. I sure was surprised to win big too. Paul Callus October 19, 2016 at 2:44 PM You deserved your top placement, Andrea! Thank you for the faith you showed re my entry:) Regards // paul

Janis Medders Tobechi October 16, 2016 at 6:23 PM Congratulations on your top placement. Lovely kimo. Paul Callus October 19, 2016 at 2:41 PM Thank you, Janis. Yours was also a worthy winner!

Beautiful Scars October 16, 2016 at 2:12 PM wow Paul! this is perfect Kimo..I love this one dear man... Congrats on your placement! :)-luloo Paul Callus October 16, 2016 at 2:28 PM Yours is a lovely reaction, Laura:) So pleased that you liked it. Thank you:) ~ Regards // paul

Anu Nayak October 16, 2016 at 1:42 PM Hearty congrats on your great win dear Paul, lovely imagery , can visualise the old man here in the leafy terrain,nicely penned kimo, enjoyed it!//love, Anu:) Paul Callus October 16, 2016 at 2:25 PM Thank you, Anu. I love your insightful feedback:) Regards /x/ paul

Hija De La Luna October 13, 2016 at 11:23 PM I can feel the weight in your words. So few yet the impact is full! I am sure this will earn its rightful place in the contest!! Excellent, Paul! Paul Callus October 14, 2016 at 7:44 AM Thank you for the insightful feedback, Hija...and for the faith you show in this Kimo:) Warm regards // paul

Sneha Rv October 12, 2016 at 10:06 AM Ooh, this is so beautiful!! Such lovely metaphor :)) Hope this does very well in the contest! Paul Callus October 12, 2016 at 1:53 PM Many thanks, Sneha! Your visit and comments are truly appreciated:) All the best:) paul

Agnes Krampe October 11, 2016 at 8:55 PM Great kimo, Paul. The form fits perfectly - one can feel the weight dragging as the lines get shorter. Good luck on the contest. Agnes Paul Callus October 12, 2016 at 1:51 PM Your feedback is a pleasure to read, Agnes! Thank you. Regards // paul

Tim Ryerson October 11, 2016 at 5:29 AM Boy, I can identify with THIS Paul...VERY well done including a nice little twist at the end. Here in South Louisiana the summers are brutal and the winters are short but I find that the older I get the less I can tolerate either extreme...too hot or too cold. I see a sure winner here - Tim Paul Callus October 11, 2016 at 11:57 AM Thank you, Tim, for a pleasant visit and the positive feedback. Like you, I tend to feel heat and cold, much more than in my youth, when they had little effect on me! Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich October 11, 2016 at 12:35 AM very well done, Paul. I quite like this. Paul Callus October 11, 2016 at 11:53 AM I quite like it myself:) But I shouldn't be writing about old age...not at my age:) Regards // paul

Chris Hagy October 10, 2016 at 6:52 PM This is a great write Paul, very effective! Paul Callus October 11, 2016 at 11:15 AM Thank you, Chris. Glad you like it. Regards // paul

Alexis Y. October 10, 2016 at 9:25 AM Hi Paul, You have penned a good Kimo. I agree with others it's good observation. I wish you the best in the contest:-) Alexis Paul Callus October 10, 2016 at 11:36 AM Thank you for your complimentary remarks, Alexis. Best regards // paul

Scott Thirtyseven October 10, 2016 at 8:00 AM Great vision, love the weight of this one. Paul Callus October 10, 2016 at 11:34 AM Thank you, Scott; a pleasure to have you stopping by. Regards // paul

Probir Gupta October 10, 2016 at 6:31 AM Very aesthetic ... Paul Callus October 10, 2016 at 10:25 AM Hmmm "aesthetic"....now that sounds philosophical:) Thank you, Probir. Regards // paul

Paloma P October 10, 2016 at 5:47 AM Profoundly effective in a few succinct lines. Paul Callus October 10, 2016 at 10:14 AM Thank you, Paloma; your input is appreciated. Regards // paul

CayCay Godwin October 9, 2016 at 11:04 PM Truth spoken! My Mom is in a senior residence and I see this truth a great deal. It is a hard one to reconcile with ... CayCay Paul Callus October 10, 2016 at 9:18 AM Old age is not something to look forward to, CayCay, but it's a reality that can't be ignored! Thank you for reading and commenting. Regards // paul

Daniel Turner October 9, 2016 at 6:17 PM A very wise observation, Paul I love it! Paul Callus October 10, 2016 at 9:03 AM Your nice feedback helps carry some of that weight, Daniel:) Thank you. Regards // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu October 9, 2016 at 5:34 PM Hello Paul when winter beckons, everyone has trouble walking on the snow covered sidewalks. I am glad that you won the I enjoyed this poem.contest on Oct.9th Paul Callus October 10, 2016 at 9:00 AM Thank you for reading and enjoying, Darlene. I'm not a winter fan, although I can appreciate some of its brighter aspects! Regards // paul

Tim Smith October 9, 2016 at 5:34 PM This a tremendous piece Paul...three lines and it says it all Paul Callus October 10, 2016 at 9:01 AM I am pleased that you like it, Tim. Thank you. Regards // paul