Jordyn Linkenback Poet Villanelle

When I Close My Eyes

Night Whispers in my ear, promising sweet

Dreams from another world. My eyes lidded

With wonder of images that aren't complete.



My consciousness blurs, I scrunch up my feet.

Dream realm returns, I enter it timid.

Night whispers in my ear, promising. Sweet



Melodies drift down a rain ridden street.

Colors explode to make the dull gilded.

I wonder of images that aren't complete.



I dream in color that's full of deceit,

My journey confused but benefited

Night. Whispers in my ear, promising sweet



Souls of good fortune. The spell obsolete,

Slips off my mind. The day then comes guilted,

I linger with images that aren't complete.



Startling gold sun begins to reach its peak,

But my mind is in bed, dreaming tinted.

Night whispers in my ear, promising sweet

Wonder of images that now are complete.

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Anne-Lise Andresen November 2, 2014 at 6:41 AM - Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Jordyn - I choose your first written villanelle poem - I like it a lot, beautiful !! - Nice to meet you! - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- Be kind and keep PoetrySoup as a haven -(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you for posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Pace Ink-U-Script October 29, 2014 at 6:03 AM I can definitely agree with Gary...This is beautifully painted!!!

Gary Bateman October 28, 2014 at 7:05 PM Jordyn, I enjoyed your Villanelle here immensely. The tone, pitch, tenor, and imagery are all quite wonderful. Most Excellent in every respect. And a most deserved "7" from me. This one is a FAV for me too!! Cheers and Spill Ink!! Gary Jordyn Linkenback October 28, 2014 at 7:08 PM Thank you so much!