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When Deprived of Your Love

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Who do I become, when your shadow fades? Not a man, but a map with the roads erased— A shell with echoes where heartbeats once played, A dusk without promise, the sun’s warmth betrayed. I become the silence between the stars, Wandering empty, bearing invisible scars. Each breath a question, unanswered, unheard— The world still turns, but it spins out of word. My laughter dims into distant rain, Memories bloom, but they taste like pain. I am not whole—I am the absence of light, A clock that ticks only deep in the night. The mirror denies me; I’m ghost in the glass, A soul made of stillness that no prayers pass. Without your compass, I falter and roam, No place is shelter, no house is home. But even as I unravel, piece by piece, I cradle the ruins, refuse the release. For to be broken by love is to still have known A fire so bright, it burned to the bone. And maybe, just maybe, the ashes remain— A whisper of hope in the hollow of pain.

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Date: 4/29/2025 12:34:00 PM
Jay, this poem is so good, sad yet beautiful too, wonderful… Beryl
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Date: 4/27/2025 1:31:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. "The mirror denies me; I’m ghost in the glass," is a great line. Hope you are OK.... Have a wonderful Sunday writing away............
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Date: 4/26/2025 9:30:00 PM
Another amazing poem. Thanks for commenting to mine,Jay
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Date: 4/25/2025 3:37:00 PM
A great heartfelt poem - beautiful memories touched by a sense of loss and sadness...very well-crafted!
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Date: 4/25/2025 12:44:00 PM
A fire so bright, it burned to the bone. That sounds deep and so intense , love the weighty poem, great write Jay
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Date: 4/25/2025 11:12:00 AM
- "But even as I unravel, piece by piece, I cradle the ruins, refuse the release" - Even though everything fades with time, it will never be completely gone - Memories emerge like shadows from the past ... some with joy others with sadness ... a deeply moving poem, Jay :) - Have a lovely weekend :) - hugs
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