What Was Broken

I Opened myself up to your words As they gently welcomed me in Letting me experience your emotions Every joy, pain, love and guilty sin Strolled through each perfect rhyme Each poignant word I embraced Captivated by each of your stories Which a picture your pen had traced I absorbed each of your feelings Through my veins they began to flow Hearing every word that you wrote Prayed one day a peace you'd know You teased my simple expectations With your music and words you had spoken As if you was sending vibrations out searching For one to understand what was broken
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Neumann Avatar
April 26, 2020 at 6:07 AM
Well said. Beutiful and poignant. Kind wishes, Kai
Chiri Avatar
April 30, 2020 at 7:58 AM
So appreciated thank you!;)
Gaul Avatar
March 26, 2020 at 9:27 AM
Loved the last line completing the unbroken poetic circle of this masterful rhyming verse. Congratulations.
Chiri Avatar
March 26, 2020 at 9:07 PM
Thank you! I'm glad you noticed that!;)
Roper Avatar
March 25, 2020 at 11:14 PM
Brenda, great romantic poem a big congratulations on your win in Brian's contest-Stay safe and healthy my friend. Hugs Eve
Chiri Avatar
March 26, 2020 at 9:07 PM
Thank you Eve you too! Can't afford to keep getting sick!;)
Ibeh Avatar
March 25, 2020 at 9:21 AM
Yet another beautiful offering from you! Congratulations on your deserving win, Brenda!
Chiri Avatar
March 26, 2020 at 9:06 PM
Edward thank you!;)
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 25, 2020 at 1:11 AM
Congratulations on having this wonderful poem place First Brenda! xxoo
Chiri Avatar
March 26, 2020 at 9:06 PM
Connie thank you!;)
Kauffman Avatar
March 25, 2020 at 1:00 AM
Beautiful metaphor of poetry expressing romance. Really wonderful Brenda. Congratulations Brenda!
Chiri Avatar
March 26, 2020 at 9:06 PM
Thank you so much Sam!;)
Wolf Avatar
March 5, 2020 at 7:35 PM
I hereby promote you from 'Princess of Passion' to 'Queen of Hearts.' Your new throne will be ready in 7 to 10 business days. Your tracking number is BOND007. Poetry Hugs :) gw
Chiri Avatar
March 11, 2020 at 12:41 PM
Ah the prince of smiles!!! Thank you so much Gershon I so appreciate your stopping by!;)
Theraven Avatar
February 29, 2020 at 10:01 PM
Brenda, Simply wonderful. The Spring couldn't wait for this fledgling pledge. -Richard
Chiri Avatar
March 11, 2020 at 12:40 PM
Richard thank you so much for stopping by!;)
Fleming Avatar
February 29, 2020 at 10:57 AM
I really like this one, Poetess...ticks all the boxes. Rhymes beautifully I have to say -- very much enjoyed! With fondest thoughts as always. :) john
Chiri Avatar
March 11, 2020 at 12:40 PM
Thank you John for your continued support of my work!;)
Ashley Avatar
February 28, 2020 at 8:39 PM
Oh, dear sister, this is exquisite! What softened beauty is bared by the tip of your poetic pen. I love how the emotion is tenderly ripened as your poem unfolds. What a great display of your towering talent, my crazy sis! Even the Unicorns are cheering.. and you know how hard they are to impress! lol! Party in the tree house.. I'll send the limpy gimpy butler to find bro bro!! Love and hugs, Dragon Fire. Your sane and not-as-combustible sissy.. ~Illuminatra <3
Chiri Avatar
March 11, 2020 at 12:39 PM
My sane sissy how nice of you to stop by! You truly are missed my dear sister! Thank you so very much!;)
Mcconnell Avatar
February 28, 2020 at 3:38 PM
fine penning Brenda, romantically sweet and touching. Have a blessed day, Gordon
Chiri Avatar
March 11, 2020 at 12:38 PM
Gordon thank you you have a blessed day too!;)
Krutsinger Avatar
February 28, 2020 at 3:29 PM
Such a delicate romantic missive that is filled with love my friend.
Chiri Avatar
March 11, 2020 at 12:38 PM
Ahh my county friend thank you so much!;)
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