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What Was Broken

I Opened myself up to your words As they gently welcomed me in Letting me experience your emotions Every joy, pain, love and guilty sin Strolled through each perfect rhyme Each poignant word I embraced Captivated by each of your stories Which a picture your pen had traced I absorbed each of your feelings Through my veins they began to flow Hearing every word that you wrote Prayed one day a peace you'd know You teased my simple expectations With your music and words you had spoken As if you was sending vibrations out searching For one to understand what was broken

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020




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Date: 4/26/2020 6:07:00 AM
Well said. Beutiful and poignant. Kind wishes, Kai
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 4/30/2020 7:58:00 AM
So appreciated thank you!;)
Date: 3/26/2020 9:27:00 AM
Loved the last line completing the unbroken poetic circle of this masterful rhyming verse. Congratulations.
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 3/26/2020 9:07:00 PM
Thank you! I'm glad you noticed that!;)
Date: 3/25/2020 11:14:00 PM
Brenda, great romantic poem a big congratulations on your win in Brian's contest-Stay safe and healthy my friend. Hugs Eve
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 3/26/2020 9:07:00 PM
Thank you Eve you too! Can't afford to keep getting sick!;)
Date: 3/25/2020 9:21:00 AM
Yet another beautiful offering from you! Congratulations on your deserving win, Brenda!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 3/26/2020 9:06:00 PM
Edward thank you!;)
Date: 3/25/2020 1:11:00 AM
Congratulations on having this wonderful poem place First Brenda! xxoo
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 3/26/2020 9:06:00 PM
Connie thank you!;)
Date: 3/25/2020 1:00:00 AM
Beautiful metaphor of poetry expressing romance. Really wonderful Brenda. Congratulations Brenda!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 3/26/2020 9:06:00 PM
Thank you so much Sam!;)
Date: 3/5/2020 7:35:00 PM
I hereby promote you from 'Princess of Passion' to 'Queen of Hearts.' Your new throne will be ready in 7 to 10 business days. Your tracking number is BOND007. Poetry Hugs :) gw
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 3/11/2020 12:41:00 PM
Ah the prince of smiles!!! Thank you so much Gershon I so appreciate your stopping by!;)
Date: 2/29/2020 10:01:00 PM
Brenda, Simply wonderful. The Spring couldn't wait for this fledgling pledge. -Richard
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 3/11/2020 12:40:00 PM
Richard thank you so much for stopping by!;)
Date: 2/29/2020 10:57:00 AM
I really like this one, Poetess...ticks all the boxes. Rhymes beautifully I have to say -- very much enjoyed! With fondest thoughts as always. :) john
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 3/11/2020 12:40:00 PM
Thank you John for your continued support of my work!;)
Date: 2/28/2020 8:39:00 PM
Oh, dear sister, this is exquisite! What softened beauty is bared by the tip of your poetic pen. I love how the emotion is tenderly ripened as your poem unfolds. What a great display of your towering talent, my crazy sis! Even the Unicorns are cheering.. and you know how hard they are to impress! lol! Party in the tree house.. I'll send the limpy gimpy butler to find bro bro!! Love and hugs, Dragon Fire. Your sane and not-as-combustible sissy.. ~Illuminatra <3
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 3/11/2020 12:39:00 PM
My sane sissy how nice of you to stop by! You truly are missed my dear sister! Thank you so very much!;)
Date: 2/28/2020 3:38:00 PM
fine penning Brenda, romantically sweet and touching. Have a blessed day, Gordon
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 3/11/2020 12:38:00 PM
Gordon thank you you have a blessed day too!;)
Date: 2/28/2020 3:29:00 PM
Such a delicate romantic missive that is filled with love my friend.
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 3/11/2020 12:38:00 PM
Ahh my county friend thank you so much!;)

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