Get Your Premium Membership

What life from the sea

What life... What life from the sea... What life from the sea, has a right? What life from the sea has a right to live with me? Shall I jump in and the noble fish that swim to me, be my noble friends? Do we romp and play in the waves, and act like friends? Do I now let them in to play? Do I except them? Be freinds? Maybe... I should select one. Or fish, cast out a deep sea pole. Catch them just one at a time, only now keep the best. Play God, and decide which one to devour at the dinner table this day? Which do I let go to romp in the waves with me? Do I have the right to be that... Do I have the right... The right? To be... Do I have the right... Do I have the right to be that... Do I have the right to be that presumptuous? What presumptous right would make me think I could do as I darn well please? What presumptuous right do I have to be that? Cast out a net, catch a whole school? Place them, set my needs? No rights? What Earth? What on Earth can have... What on Earth can have the power? What on Earth can have the power, one over the next? The mighty lion, shall he reign over Earthly creatures, choose ones to slaugter? The elephant his magnificent size, shall reign? Man, with all his intelligence... Look what his knowledge... Has done? This is a style I came up with, I call it "The Arrow Takedown", by Judy A. Riley Rules; build a story to a point, bring it back down to blend to the next verse. The Arrow counts are Four Arrows, Syllible count on each arrow stanza is 2,5,8,12,18,12,8,5,2. The poem must have a beginning and an end conclusion. Hope you like this, Thanks Judy Riley

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 3/26/2009 8:53:00 AM
Dear Judy, A new style Very impressive and the flow and meaning so clear I have to read this a few more times and then TRY to write "The Arrow Takedown" Ingenius Always...HG
Login to Reply
Date: 3/22/2009 7:20:00 PM
Interesting that you came up with your own form.:) And a lot of deep thoughts, rhetorical questions to consider....Best wishes, Sara:)
Login to Reply
Date: 3/21/2009 4:10:00 PM
Incredible meter with a truly original style, Judy! This poem moves and weaves emotions at the same time.
Login to Reply