Joanna Daniel Poet Rhyme

Weak Streak

My aching frame feels like breaking
Shattered glass shards scattered
I'm quaking, totally shaking
Battered weak bones smattered

My paining form's fully draining
Crumbling bits come tumbling
This straining strength slowly waning
Grumbling parts go stumbling

This hurting is disconcerting
Fractured frailty captured
Exerting flesh is diverting
Ruptured decline structured


05.01.2021

For Charlotte's "Open Poetry 4" contest

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Andrea Dietrich May 13, 2021 at 12:16 PM It sounds horrible to have this kind of pain. I have felt it and my sister especially does. Good job making it "come alive" through description.

Daniel Turner May 2, 2021 at 5:46 AM We all deal with pain from time to time. Some more than others. All types of pain can be debilitating. Good luck in the contest Jo. I hope all is well with you and yours. Have a blessed Sunday:)

Victor Buhagiar May 2, 2021 at 2:05 AM I am all aches and pains. I must just bear them. Be strong my friend. Best of luck.

Tom Cunningham May 1, 2021 at 7:14 AM Getting on in years certainly brings burdens to us Jo, oh to be twenty again. Best of luck in the contest. Tom