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Weak Streak

My aching frame feels like breaking Shattered glass shards scattered I'm quaking, totally shaking Battered weak bones smattered My paining form's fully draining Crumbling bits come tumbling This straining strength slowly waning Grumbling parts go stumbling This hurting is disconcerting Fractured frailty captured Exerting flesh is diverting Ruptured decline structured 05.01.2021 For Charlotte's "Open Poetry 4" contest

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/13/2021 12:16:00 PM

It sounds horrible to have this kind of pain. I have felt it and my sister especially does. Good job making it "come alive" through description.

Daniel Turner

Date: 5/2/2021 5:46:00 AM

We all deal with pain from time to time. Some more than others. All types of pain can be debilitating. Good luck in the contest Jo. I hope all is well with you and yours. Have a blessed Sunday:)

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/2/2021 2:05:00 AM

I am all aches and pains. I must just bear them. Be strong my friend. Best of luck.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/1/2021 7:14:00 AM

Getting on in years certainly brings burdens to us Jo, oh to be twenty again. Best of luck in the contest. Tom