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Weak Spots Ii

The rain and a sigh The silence before a daring drop A calm utterance of hope whilst sharing a prayer A well-timed gaze An avid expectancy Followed by a tickle of surprise A thoughtful offering No money can buy The word “adore” Amongst a woodland wild A deep kiss in cold places The heat between eager lips Literatures of fondness Dismembering time and space A lingering tune With a poignant resolve

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Date: 1/10/2018 3:20:00 PM
wow, such beautiful imagery. Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments on my poetry. Let me see your next part for these"weak spots"
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Date: 1/5/2018 3:58:00 AM
Each poem in this series seems to be guided by an underlying emotion, the first being perhaps sadness or maybe simply internalizing your feelings. This one to me is much more positive with shorter lines and quicker pace. I get the sense of a gentle smile on your face when you wrote this.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/6/2018 10:22:00 PM
You're spot on James. You're really in tuned with my work and I am so happy you read them all. I'll be writing more of this series soon. My main focus has been on my Light On the Devil 's Chord series. <3~Laura
Date: 1/2/2018 3:18:00 AM
This is all very nice, Laura. I find it eloquently soothing in a captivating and wistful sort of way...really is quite charming. Onto part III. :) john
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/6/2018 10:21:00 PM
You're quite charming yourself John! Thank you for your pleasant review. <3~Laura

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