We Two

My hopes for love lay in collapse. Age grew, love left ~ then you brought heat. You came in view with your perhaps. My hopes for love lay in collapse. You sought me out ~ I let time lapse. You gave me a funny heartbeat. My hopes for love lay in collapse. Age grew, love left ~ then you brought heat. Now I so love being we two Alone in our own paradise. Our couple time is time spent true. Now I so love being we two. At first sight of you, I withdrew Thinking your flirt overly nice. Now I so love being we two Alone in our own paradise. CayCay Jennings October 4, 2015

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Wendy Rycroft

Date: 9/2/2016 2:06:00 AM

Congrats well done x

Sandra Haight

Date: 8/31/2016 4:07:00 PM

A lovely Triolet, CayCay, and so well-written to fit the theme of 'love reckons a second time', and it is so wonderful that you found love, companionship, and happiness. Congrats on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/31/2016 4:03:00 PM

A 7 for this well-written, appealing, WINNING poem, CayCay! Janice

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 8/31/2016 2:12:00 PM

Congratulations CayCay on the placement of the contest.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/9/2015 1:21:00 AM

your first one?? Wow, you did GREAT, Caycay!! I especially like the first one. the third and sixth lines are so creative! Keep it up doing some more triolet!

CayCay Jennings
Date: 10/9/2015 7:51:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea - your comments are especially encouraging. You sure staid up until the wee hours - I hope you feel good today ... CayCay

James Inman

Date: 10/6/2015 8:22:00 AM

Beautiful write, CayCay. We, such a nice word.

CayCay Jennings
Date: 10/6/2015 10:04:00 PM

Thank you, James. I hope there isn't a sadness to your 'we' comment, if so - never give up. I had. Truly, I had given up on a perfect partner when perfect companionship found me. I'm glad you liked the poem ... CayCay

Paul Callus

Date: 10/5/2015 4:35:00 PM

Enjoyed this double triolet, CayCay; very romantic. Lovely to see a person rising up from defeat at finding new love. ~ Triolet is not as easy as it looks, but you have got the hang of it. // paul

CayCay Jennings
Date: 10/6/2015 10:06:00 PM

Hey, Paul - thank you very much for your sweet comments and, yes indeedy, I will be happy to read your triolet. It is a challenging form, but that just makes it all the more fun to attempt, right? ... CayCay

Paul Callus
Date: 10/5/2015 4:37:00 PM

Maybe I can tempt you to read my co-write with Eileen..."A Triolet Tryst":)

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/5/2015 6:54:00 AM

I know next to nothing about Triolet but know some things about love thus, from that perspective, a very romantic and beautiful poem, dear CaCay!

CayCay Jennings
Date: 10/5/2015 12:21:00 PM

How funny that we left each other similar comments about forms we have yet to study! I am so glad to see you here and thank you for very sweet words ... CayCay

Mark Woods

Date: 10/4/2015 11:31:00 PM

CayCay a very sweet poem, to obviously a very special man. I'm not familiar with triolet I will now have to investigate it.

CayCay Jennings
Date: 10/5/2015 1:00:00 AM

Hey, Mark. You would enjoy the challenge of the Triolet, obviously you need a line worthy of repeat. I'm so glad you thought it sweet and yes, a special man. Thank you ... CayCay

Michael Tor

Date: 10/4/2015 10:38:00 PM

Nice write CayCay love is wonderful when you have it. Enjoyed reading.

CayCay Jennings
Date: 10/5/2015 1:02:00 AM

Michael, thank you for commenting. I am pleased you enjoyed it. Love is such a blessing and, in my case, an anchor ... CayCay