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Wavedance

Lace waves lap tender shore Brush away layered sand Erode this sodden land Revealing something raw A hypnotic deep trance Horizon shrouded day Clouds tumbling away As the salty waves dance As the salty waves dance

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James Swartz

Date: 9/21/2017 11:10:00 PM

Great poem! Nice peaceful easy feeling words to go with the flow of it. I really enjoyed it.

Tim Smith

Date: 8/31/2017 12:34:00 PM

Such lovely flow here Lorna...a peaceful feel

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/29/2017 5:41:00 PM

Just read your poem and I really like it. I like how you repeated the last line. And how you had the clouds tumbling away at the end!

Lorna Caizley
Date: 8/29/2017 7:05:00 PM

thank you so much for your lovely words, I was in a bit of a state of wonder when writing this Lorna xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/29/2017 5:40:00 PM

so you were raised on 60's music too!! Were you in school when Herman's Hermits came out. My first record I bought was theirs. Remember three dog Night and there were so many others!! I still have all my records, about 800 of them either albums or 45's. I wonder if I could make some money with them and yet they are part of my youth. Maybe I will never part with them until I die!

Lorna Caizley
Date: 8/29/2017 7:03:00 PM

Hi Andrea, I was raised on 60s musics, I wasn't born until the 80s my parents were both big music fans so that's kind of how I was raised on the stuff....Your music collection sounds amazing ;) xxx

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/29/2017 7:51:00 AM

Oh, this is very nice to read today! Peaceful. I like the repeat at the end too :)