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Waterfall

Leaping fish spawning leaf floats by waterfall lyrical bird sings Waves crashing on beach river maundering clouds puffy white sail by

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Hilo Poet

Date: 12/19/2023 5:22:00 PM

Aloha, Shadow. I was delighted with the wordplay you've presented within your entertaining haiku forms. The active staging, the nearby friendlies, the faraway familiars ... magnificent harmony, my friend. Best of Seasons and 2024. Aloha, William

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 12/19/2023 6:01:00 PM

ty William and aloha ty I enjoy writing in the form some time read my bees or rainbow if like this style hugs Shadow

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/19/2023 3:07:00 AM

Oh my, this is such a breathtaking haiku poem which beautifully captures the scenic elegance of nature and oceanic imageries in such an elegant way~ wow! "leaf floats by waterfall", "clouds puffy white sail by" Ahh, smooth serenity flows in these words... Absolutely impeccable..

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 12/19/2023 5:45:00 AM

Hi Hiya ty very much I am so glad you like them and for your visit hugs Shadow

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/18/2023 2:52:00 PM

outstanding Haikus, Shadow! Your imagery grabbed my attention (river meandering). Well done...have a great evening, Sara

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 12/18/2023 3:18:00 PM

ty Sara you are too kind it is maundering like a tribe fighting their enemies hugs Shadow

Silent One

Date: 12/18/2023 1:03:00 PM

Two vivid haiku here. Your choice of words are very good and the little use of adjectives are always important for these forms and you have done that here...

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 12/18/2023 2:23:00 PM

ty so much SO for your comments hugs

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/18/2023 11:54:00 AM

You did a great job, with this both haikus, Shadow. The picture you conveyed of a fish jumping out of the water to make babies, the leaf floating in the water, and a bird singing a beautiful song is just perfect.

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 12/18/2023 2:26:00 PM

sotto ty so much for your remarks hugs Shadow