Waterfall

Beautiful white roar, The forceful sounds of nature; From champagne cascades.

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Lena Pate

Date: 5/12/2009 4:40:00 PM

I loved the comparison to champagne. The froth and the bubbles. Very picturesque.

Diane Christian

Date: 5/11/2009 1:44:00 AM

thanks for your kind comments on my poem 5000, this is a great poem about a waterfall, I have had a vision of Jesus standing next to a waterfall with his arms streched right open wide in a welcoming way, and there was some rocks too thats how I wrote my poem my rock and waves of forgivness, , the water is Like his Holy spirit flowing down cleansing us so refreshing so peaceful so natural so alive, thanks for the beauty in your words a great write my friend. God bless you from diane

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 5/10/2009 4:42:00 PM

Really Beautiful Haiku! Laura :)

Colin Mitchell Williams

Date: 5/10/2009 11:42:00 AM

this is eloquently put Raul... !

Brian Strand

Date: 5/7/2009 12:32:00 AM

Like L3 a lot Raul.Rgds Brian

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 5/5/2009 4:02:00 PM

Raul, Ooh...I like it. I like it! Very nice haiku. I love the "champagne cascades". Your poem took me to Niagra Falls and the misty water clouds that form just above the receiving water as the descending water falls below. Thank you for your poem...and the memory. Love, Dane

Sharon Winter

Date: 5/5/2009 2:46:00 PM

Wonderful! Love the champagne analogy here! Brilliant! Love, Shar

Date: 5/5/2009 1:36:00 PM

Really like the last line in this one--so creative. Nice use of imagery. Enjoyed this poem. Blessings to you for sharing it. Karen

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/5/2009 1:32:00 PM

I love seeing the beauty of the world through your eyes, Raul! lovely work!~ Carrie

Tyler Martin

Date: 5/5/2009 12:51:00 PM

Very descriptive haiku, nice work as always your genius expresses your love for nature in a beautiful way. Tyler

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 5/5/2009 11:53:00 AM

I love waterfalls, wonderful poem! And thank you for the congrats on my 3 poems making the final cut. It's a first for me. Nervous as a hen with a fox in the henhouse! good luck! ~Trudy~

Jane Bowen

Date: 5/5/2009 11:13:00 AM

Quite the picture! Loved this one...thanks for the comments...I appreciate any feedback! Your haiku is lovely...the second line is the meat of it and does exactly what it's supposed to! Great vibe and imagery!!! Always a friend at the soupie...Jane

Mohammad Yamin

Date: 5/5/2009 11:11:00 AM

Thanks Raul for your good wishes for my poem Winds of Change. Your Haiku is a beautiful picturization of waterfall. You deserve to be congratulated on such an elegant work. -Mohammad