Water Moccasin

ancient water springs
  next to the lazing Moccasin
upon the shoreline
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Cornish Avatar
November 25, 2017 at 4:41 PM
Good intro, but gotta take it outside the box (the AHA moment)----for instance, in the last line----lightening strikes----or anything that is other than an obvious continuation of thought----later
Ashley Avatar
November 8, 2017 at 9:04 PM
Ryn, lovely imagery in your wonderful haiku. Enjoyed!
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