Wandering

I wandered along a jagged road
And found what I had lost, as such
A mass of visions, scenes and bones
I wandered along a jagged road
Two steps I take to greet tomorrow
Jolted by the paint I touch
I wandered along a jagged road
And learnt to leave the plague I clutch

agechildhoodconfusiongrowthmemoryi do not know?

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Poet Destroyer A

September 1, 2013 at 2:54 PM

Aiden, , congratulations!! awesome "Triolet" ... xox~ LINDA :-)

Sara Kendrick

August 26, 2013 at 4:02 PM

Creative and expressive winning work.Congrats on your win..Sara

Danesh Morgan

August 26, 2013 at 4:06 AM

Congrats on your win. Morgan

Skat A

August 24, 2013 at 5:46 PM

Hi Aiden, love your winning poem...SKAT

Charmaine Chircop

August 23, 2013 at 4:43 PM

Welcome to ps..Very powerful verse

Just That Archaic Poet

August 23, 2013 at 6:50 AM

BAM! You did it again: you said quite a bit in just 8 lines, and that last line is superb; brilliant way to end the piece. Kudos; I enjoyed this piece very much!

Karen Anglesey

August 22, 2013 at 11:39 AM

I vision many of life's roads jagged as well... leaving the "plague I clutch" is always a goal in order to attain something more satisfying. Well done. I haven't written a triolet but this sure sounds close ... Welcome to the Soup :) (Click on a poet below and comment on their work. I am looking forward to see some comments from you on my poems)

Skat A

August 21, 2013 at 10:41 AM

Hi Aiden, hope your journey gets better at the end, your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers, I love it!! Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND". Hugs* Skat *

Aiden Asoll

August 21, 2013 at 3:55 PM

Hey, thanks I tried writing one to enter the triolet competition. Struggle slightly to convey what I wanted whilst keeping the structure I guess, as its kinda ambiguous but ahh well, I would drop you a hello and an introduction, only I don't know how, you could always drop me one though? I'm guessing replying would be fairly simple after receiving.

Anne-Lise Andresen

August 21, 2013 at 10:02 AM

Welcome to P-Soup, Aiden ! - Nice to read your first poem here. - Hope you will have much pleasure to be with us. - Wishing you good luck - have a nice day! - Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours. - My first greeting to you from Norway / / / Anne-Lise :)

Poet Destroyer A

August 21, 2013 at 8:34 AM

Good morning Aiden, keep enjoying your daily steps.. , thank you for expressing your write and finding this site. -A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. Dropping by to invite you to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* -Looking forward in following and reading your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@ .

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