Waltz

Long left and long right
A head swings to and fro
Inside a waltz repeats a loop
Outside the world careless goes by
His foot swings like a pendulum
Banging on a skirting board
They might say
“It’s sad, he’s mad”
He might say
“I remember we danced, in a trance”
Longing left and longing right
His heart yearns for his love
That left that night
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Knop Avatar
May 8, 2010 at 3:35 PM
Very nice written poem, David! Now they have a weekly show on german TV and it's called "Let's Dance" where VIP's are trained by professional dancers to perform certain dances and the viewers have to decide who were best...Quite nice!..Thanks for your comments and have a great Sunday...Gert
Culverhouse Avatar
April 30, 2010 at 7:39 PM
rhythmic poem
Dietrich Avatar
April 30, 2010 at 6:25 PM
Oh, my, that is so nice. And the ending is just so sad, but cool how you lined it up with the rhythm and message of the poem. Gosh, I haven't seen you in a while. What happened? About In Retro,it's probably one of the very few of my poems that could be considered ambigous. But if you were raised Mormon, you would understand it easily, I think. it's actually theological with my opinion sprinkled in! LUv, Andrea
Maharani Avatar
April 21, 2010 at 6:15 AM
Dance away the sorrow! Nice way to enjoy the pain!
Dabomb™ Avatar
April 20, 2010 at 8:32 PM
Nice pun on words, good write.;)
Delacroix Avatar
April 20, 2010 at 7:46 PM
Sad, but beautifully written David. Thanks for sharing, Caroline.
Brown Avatar
April 20, 2010 at 10:26 AM
I enjoyed reading the poetry you presented to us today David. Thank you for sharing it and may you have a day full of love and inspiration. Love, Carol
Devonshire Avatar
April 20, 2010 at 7:06 AM
The memory of your love is articulated so melodically in this wonderful "waltz," David. For me it's always been easy to fall into a trance while dancing. Quite a delightful read though the ending is sad. Love, Carolyn
Mehta Avatar
April 20, 2010 at 7:05 AM
A fine interplay of words
Culverhouse Avatar
April 20, 2010 at 4:07 AM
Great play on words, much talent here!!
A   Avatar
April 20, 2010 at 3:22 AM
Nice one, a bit deep. Have yourself a good one, P.D.
Chircop Avatar
April 19, 2010 at 10:50 PM
Lovely poem flowing so sweet as Waltz dancing..the ending is sad indeed...Charma
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