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Voices

I's walking alone
                                         Near down the stream of silence
                                                    Called my spirit

                                              "Ssshhh" calm blow of air
                                             Embracing my warm body
                                                     Uplift my spirit

                                                   "Ribbit, Ribbit" Oh!
                                          The amazing chants of frogs
                                                  Flattering my heart

                                                "Buzzzzz" the busy bees
                                         Dancing whilst butts were working
                                             Ouch! sweet kiss you shared

                                              "Tweet" the lovely birds!
                                           Circling around the bright sun
                                                 What a wonderful!

                                                 "Tik" ...can't identify
                                           There's moving under my feet
                                                   Alas! pygmy prey! 

                                                Can't count what I hear
                                           Wake up my dear sleeping soul
                                                Give one chance to live

Copyright © Elai Cee | Year Posted 2013

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Paul Schneiter Date: 3/24/2016 11:16:00 PM Brilliant construction combined with words that give life to sounds make this poem remarkable. Then there is the message-rich concluding stanza: wonderful! Login to Reply

Robin Davis Date: 9/27/2013 10:35:00 PM This is a nice write full of imagery and creativity. You take the reader on a nature journey full of life and wonderment. nice job Login to Reply

Abdulhafeez Oyewole Date: 5/30/2013 11:07:00 AM This is very beautiful Elai. Well done on your brilliant quill. AO Login to Reply Elai Cee Date: 6/1/2013 8:41:00 AM thanks OA

Kabuteng P.Ink K. Date: 5/28/2013 12:14:00 PM I enjoyed your inclusion of sounds here Elai--- so many beautiful sounds from nature if we only stop and listen... very nice. Thanks as well for passing by my poem Login to Reply Elai Cee Date: 5/29/2013 1:12:00 AM thank you... P.Ink

Bl Devnath Date: 5/26/2013 10:34:00 AM Beautiful picture worded in to sweet haiku. It's called genius presentation. Thanks......,loved always, bl Login to Reply Elai Cee Date: 5/26/2013 12:30:00 PM thank u BL

John Posey Date: 5/26/2013 9:11:00 AM Having written a few haiku poems, I can appreciate what you have accomplished here. You have forged this form into the smoothest haiku I have seen in a long while. Great job.... Jake Login to Reply Elai Cee Date: 5/26/2013 9:23:00 AM thaks dear John... i make all ur comments as an inspiration to enhance more my writings. God bless u!

Claiborne Randle Date: 5/21/2013 2:50:00 PM lovely Login to Reply Elai Cee Date: 5/22/2013 6:52:00 AM thanks Claiborne

Joe Maverick Date: 5/20/2013 10:55:00 PM Enyoyed reading your Haiku venture here Elai I see Lots of potential in your work hope to see more of your stuff..' Login to Reply Elai Cee Date: 5/22/2013 6:49:00 AM Thanks Joe... this can really help to see ur comment

Nette Onclaud Date: 5/20/2013 12:53:00 PM The tone of this piece floats in a charming way!.. winner... :) huggs Login to Reply Elai Cee Date: 5/22/2013 6:48:00 AM Thanks net... u'r wonderful..

Poet Destroyer A Date: 5/20/2013 8:44:00 AM Hi Elai, reformation of the soul. I like it!!! I like the first haiku. the imagery of walking alone, in silence,,, then that's when all the voices start.... good with the tik, tweet, and buzzing sound... enjoyed~ Linda Login to Reply Elai Cee Date: 5/22/2013 6:48:00 AM Miss u Linda... thank you, you are truly awesome in my heart...

Poet Tacito Date: 5/20/2013 8:24:00 AM The inner whispers longing for your voice. Incredible. Login to Reply Elai Cee Date: 5/22/2013 6:50:00 AM thanks Drake

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 5/20/2013 7:52:00 AM Divine whispers to an awaiting for enlightenment soul! Login to Reply Elai Cee Date: 5/20/2013 7:57:00 AM thank you for visiting me here... flattered by your comment.

Rev. Dr. Samuel Mack Oms Dd Date: 5/20/2013 5:50:00 AM Very Very wonderful Here is the point of God speaking through you as David said in Psalms "I lift up my soul to you Lord" this is a very very wonderful wording for todays poeple God bless and keep writing Login to Reply Elai Cee Date: 5/20/2013 7:16:00 AM Thanks Samuel. I know He made it all for us. I read the book of psalms and i have seen how beautiful and good is God! miss your comment.

Elai Cee Date: 5/20/2013 2:50:00 AM I decided to enter this in SOUND's competition under by Frank H.---so excited whether i will win or not. It's an honor to be part of it! high kick!!!---ELAI Login to Reply