Elai Cee Poet Haiku

Voices

I's walking alone
                                         Near down the stream of silence
                                                    Called my spirit

                                              "Ssshhh" calm blow of air
                                             Embracing my warm body
                                                     Uplift my spirit

                                                   "Ribbit, Ribbit" Oh!
                                          The amazing chants of frogs
                                                  Flattering my heart

                                                "Buzzzzz" the busy bees
                                         Dancing whilst butts were working
                                             Ouch! sweet kiss you shared

                                              "Tweet" the lovely birds!
                                           Circling around the bright sun
                                                 What a wonderful!

                                                 "Tik" ...can't identify
                                           There's moving under my feet
                                                   Alas! pygmy prey! 

                                                Can't count what I hear
                                           Wake up my dear sleeping soul
                                                Give one chance to live

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Paul Schneiter March 24, 2016 at 11:16 PM Brilliant construction combined with words that give life to sounds make this poem remarkable. Then there is the message-rich concluding stanza: wonderful!

Robin Davis September 27, 2013 at 10:35 PM This is a nice write full of imagery and creativity. You take the reader on a nature journey full of life and wonderment. nice job

Abdulhafeez Oyewole May 30, 2013 at 11:07 AM This is very beautiful Elai. Well done on your brilliant quill. AO Elai Cee June 1, 2013 at 8:41 AM thanks OA

Kabuteng P.Ink K. May 28, 2013 at 12:14 PM I enjoyed your inclusion of sounds here Elai--- so many beautiful sounds from nature if we only stop and listen... very nice. Thanks as well for passing by my poem Elai Cee May 29, 2013 at 1:12 AM thank you... P.Ink

Bl Devnath May 26, 2013 at 10:34 AM Beautiful picture worded in to sweet haiku. It's called genius presentation. Thanks......,loved always, bl Elai Cee May 26, 2013 at 12:30 PM thank u BL

John Posey May 26, 2013 at 9:11 AM Having written a few haiku poems, I can appreciate what you have accomplished here. You have forged this form into the smoothest haiku I have seen in a long while. Great job.... Jake Elai Cee May 26, 2013 at 9:23 AM thaks dear John... i make all ur comments as an inspiration to enhance more my writings. God bless u!

Claiborne Randle May 21, 2013 at 2:50 PM lovely Elai Cee May 22, 2013 at 6:52 AM thanks Claiborne

Joe Maverick May 20, 2013 at 10:55 PM Enyoyed reading your Haiku venture here Elai I see Lots of potential in your work hope to see more of your stuff..' Elai Cee May 22, 2013 at 6:49 AM Thanks Joe... this can really help to see ur comment

Nette Onclaud May 20, 2013 at 12:53 PM The tone of this piece floats in a charming way!.. winner... :) huggs Elai Cee May 22, 2013 at 6:48 AM Thanks net... u'r wonderful..

Poet Destroyer A May 20, 2013 at 8:44 AM Hi Elai, reformation of the soul. I like it!!! I like the first haiku. the imagery of walking alone, in silence,,, then that's when all the voices start.... good with the tik, tweet, and buzzing sound... enjoyed~ Linda Elai Cee May 22, 2013 at 6:48 AM Miss u Linda... thank you, you are truly awesome in my heart...

Poet Tacito May 20, 2013 at 8:24 AM The inner whispers longing for your voice. Incredible. Elai Cee May 22, 2013 at 6:50 AM thanks Drake

Demetrios Trifiatis May 20, 2013 at 7:52 AM Divine whispers to an awaiting for enlightenment soul! Elai Cee May 20, 2013 at 7:57 AM thank you for visiting me here... flattered by your comment.

Rev. Dr. Samuel Mack Oms Dd May 20, 2013 at 5:50 AM Very Very wonderful Here is the point of God speaking through you as David said in Psalms "I lift up my soul to you Lord" this is a very very wonderful wording for todays poeple God bless and keep writing Elai Cee May 20, 2013 at 7:16 AM Thanks Samuel. I know He made it all for us. I read the book of psalms and i have seen how beautiful and good is God! miss your comment.

Elai Cee May 20, 2013 at 2:50 AM I decided to enter this in SOUND's competition under by Frank H.---so excited whether i will win or not. It's an honor to be part of it! high kick!!!---ELAI