Ur Man

Is that your man, posted at the bar?
Dressed to impress,
gifted with his "game",
drunk driving in your car?
Is that your man, the rap star?
Drunk women clinging to every word.
Is this your man, playing around?
He should be home with you!
Instead, a horny hound,
sound with his "game".
Is that your man?
playing you for a fool?

Is that your man, avoiding you?
Showing you no love?
Cheating on you ,
disrespecting you,
pumpin' love with no glove.

Is that your man?
Your man lost his girl.
mixed Caucasian with Latin.
vanilla creme and caramel swirl.
Dressed in satin,
your man has lost his girl!!!


Jared Pickett
9/22/09
Asavvy1
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009


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Date: 3/15/2014 9:16:00 PM
Smoothness pt. 2 Jared! Once again, great piece. Definitely a writer with flair and style to match. Peace
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Date: 10/9/2009 12:13:00 PM
Nice work, great ideas and I enjoyed the last stanza. I left you some soup mail...Raul
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Date: 9/26/2009 3:21:00 PM
I See Your Description of Several Men in this Poem... (Am I Right ?) Not Just one couple, but Several ? Anyways... all The Bad Treatment is Wrong... Girl, betta' git' up and Gon' ... (smile)And I also see, that by your noticing these bad traits in a relationship ... You must be a sensitive and stand-up kinda-guy... Love Your Writing MoonBee
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Date: 9/25/2009 10:44:00 AM
*sighs* it is sad thata man would treat a lady this way and even sadder that she took it but we live and hopefully learn and move o...The Southern Belle
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Date: 9/22/2009 7:48:00 PM
yes! am chucklin!....jim
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Date: 9/22/2009 11:27:00 AM
Ow is that the way he s treating his girl?,so she ll do good if she dump him,this seems like a continuation with"ur girl"poem...,I mean you seem to want her to listen to you ore else she can be patient with her lovers childish foolness,he ll be back to her,he will,if she is so good as you describe her,sweet harmless write ,you made me smile:)Charma
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Date: 9/22/2009 10:27:00 AM
Witty way with your words in this one as usual Jared" pumping love with no glove" Lol, Sincerely Moses
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Date: 9/22/2009 8:31:00 AM
Enjoyed the write well done.
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