John Michaels Poet Rhyme

Upon the Morn'

Dread thoughts race,
feelings enmesh.
Vacant eyes,
grim glacial flesh.

Silvern tears
mark me forlorn.
World shattered
upon the morn'.

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3/4/3/4 syllables - checked with howmanysyllables.com)
(Dedicated to a friend who tragically passed recently)

6 November 2017 - entered in "A November Premiere Contest..." sponsored by Brian Strand.
(4th Place)

2 December 2017 - submitted to "Any Poem Won in a Contest in November" sponsored by Laura Loo.

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Susan Ashley December 5, 2017 at 8:36 PM Congratulations John on you fine win with your beautifully sad, heartbroken poem. Superb, pained emotional imagery my friend. I am truly sorry for your loss, please accept my condolences.. ~Susan John Michaels December 24, 2017 at 6:06 AM Thank you so much for the kind and sympathetic comments, Susan. Kind regards, John.

Eve Roper December 4, 2017 at 7:42 PM Congratulations, John ,on your win. . Hugs Eve ~`* John Michaels December 24, 2017 at 6:06 AM Thanks very much, Eve. All the best, John.

Beautiful Scars December 4, 2017 at 6:51 AM so sorry for your loss, that's terrible...I feel your pain this time of year...thank you and congrats :) John Michaels December 24, 2017 at 6:06 AM Thank you for the sympathetic comments, Laura. Kind regards, John.

Line Gauthier November 18, 2017 at 4:56 PM Well done, John. Congrats. John Michaels November 25, 2017 at 7:30 AM Thank you, Line! Regards, John.

Faye Gibson November 18, 2017 at 12:53 PM Congratulations on your placement with this emotional poem. Well done. John Michaels November 18, 2017 at 1:21 PM Thank you for your kind comments, Faye. Kind regards, John.

Susan Ashley November 13, 2017 at 6:41 PM Congratulations John on your win with this sadly emotional write. Powerful imagery. Excellent and enjoyed! John Michaels November 15, 2017 at 2:45 AM Thanks very much, Susan. Kind regards, John.

Janice Canerdy November 13, 2017 at 11:24 AM Concise, but so descriptive of a heart breaking. Congrats, John! Janice John Michaels November 13, 2017 at 1:30 PM Thank you, Janice, for your interesting interpretation - I'd not looked at it that way. Kind regards, John.

Kim Rodrigues November 13, 2017 at 6:57 AM Congrats John! Love silvern tears John Michaels November 13, 2017 at 1:29 PM Thanks for the kind comments, Kim. All the best, John.

John Fleming November 12, 2017 at 4:32 AM Short, punchy -- and most effective! Rather impressed by this little poem, John. My best regards. :) john John Michaels November 12, 2017 at 9:58 AM Thanks for your kind comments, John. Regards, John.

Andrea Dietrich November 11, 2017 at 6:06 PM This is very cool. I really like the SOUND of that one line: grim glacial flesh!! A very effective poem for setting a forlorn mood. John Michaels November 12, 2017 at 7:05 AM Thanks, Andrea. It *is* meant to be a very depressing poem, so pleased that came through. Kind regards, John.