Unwanted Breath

A dying man was gasping for air
He asked a nurse if she had some to spare
She breathed into a little phial
And with a smile upon her dial

She said how much will you pay
My phial of breath may save your day
A quiet voice from way up high
Spoke to the nurse and asked her why

She had wanted payment for her breath
When her patient was so near death
Suddenly, she heard a sound
Of soothing music all around

She looked at the dying man's face
And noticed that there was no trace
Of worry lines or wrinkles there,

He seemed to rise from his bed
A cosy pillow lay under his head
The nurse was awe-struck and gave a scream
Praying to awaken from this dream
Still holding her phial of breath.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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March 6, 2024 at 12:29 PM
Shirley what an intriguing and extremely clever write! Unexpected ending. I read it a few times….really enjoyed this one! Debx
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February 27, 2024 at 6:54 PM
Pretty sensational, other-worldly stuff there, my friend. Seijo Seance
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February 27, 2024 at 5:48 PM
Dear Shirley, this is deeply moving. The contrasting innocence and harsh reality create an emotional rollercoaster. The ending is so unexpected and powerful, leaving me breathless (pun intended). It sparked a reflection on life's fragility and the preciousness of each breath. This is such a poignant message. - Blessings, Daniel
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