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An open eye; it see's me cry.
A broken soul; that let's me go
day by day, as time flies by,
my dreams, my hope's, they seem to die.
all is lost, and time flies by,
my dreams my hopes they've all but died.
but I say to you today
please dont leave me, dont go away.
your love is life to my dying soul,
how I wish we grow old, 
together forever you and me
its how I long my life to be.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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April 25, 2016 at 8:46 PM
Jacob, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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April 21, 2016 at 8:55 PM
Hi jacob, Nice first entry. Welcome to poetry soup. Wish u a successful journey ahead........hugs
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April 22, 2016 at 7:50 AM
thank you
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April 21, 2016 at 11:56 AM
That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Jacob. :)
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April 22, 2016 at 7:52 AM
thank you
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April 21, 2016 at 10:29 AM
Jacob,, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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April 22, 2016 at 7:54 AM
thank you, this is the 1st one i've ever written, but I did want some feedback weather it was good or bad:)
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