Until You Came Along

As emptyness beats on my door
I try to word a song.
It's now so clear I'd naught to say
until you came along.

It's true, I was a most small man,
pretending I was strong;
a portrait of my own flawed self,
until you came along.

I've spent a life apart your love in but a single night,
while thoughts devoured memories of everything delight,
and daylights' conflict generates new fears to face tonight
while love demands I think upon what I know is right.

The secret that I'd loved to keep,
the one love only knows,
was oh so far beyond my reach
until you came along.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 5/7/2012 1:23:00 PM
It just needs the music and a rich voice to belt out the message here. This is a wonderful poem on the longing in love. So special Chuck, you have great style and it's a pleasure to read your verses! Luv, Lizzie
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Date: 4/6/2012 12:16:00 AM
What a beautiful poem here! I love the beginning stanza. Emptiness does seem to have a pulsing beat to it. I like how you worded that. The second one was so humble and poignant - very touching overall. Always, Laura
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Date: 4/4/2012 10:32:00 AM
this would make a great song. i love the title and think it would make an excellent chorus. a lovely poem!
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Date: 4/4/2012 5:54:00 AM
Beautifully penned words, Chuck. I love the line "and daylight's conflict..." Thanks for your comments on my Blame poem. Yes, my mom is a strong lady, a true survivor. She has challenged me. Still does...have a great day. Blessings, Rhonda
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