Brenda Chiri Poet Rhyme

Until I Am Old

The winds whispered softly
seemed to mimic my name
Holding onto a truth, where I 
was not to blame
Looming in my shadows, 
haunting me at night
Taunting me yet remaining 
just out of my sight
Keeping my dreams hostage
never giving in 
Wanting a deep true love
being my only sin
When soon time seems
broken making many demands 
Life seemed to be once again 
raising up its hands
All my many battles play 
out everyday
Doesn't seem to matter if I 
have anything to say
As they try to rock my world 
knocking me down 
Holding my head under water 
attempting to drown
When I think I've had enough 
it relinquishes it's tight hold
Whispering into my ear of 
torture until I'm old
7/8/2020

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John Fleming August 30, 2020 at 9:21 AM So many gracious comments...and every one of them most fitting for this elegant little poem of yours, Poetess. I always enjoy your poetry...but this one was that little bit extra special. Many fantastic lines...and evocative and compelling. Excellent writing! With affection :) john Brenda Chiri September 3, 2020 at 5:21 AM John you do help ones ego out I must say!:) lol I do appreciate your kind words!;) much affection:)

Jennifer Proxenos July 14, 2020 at 12:43 PM We all have our demons to fight and I feel your anxiety in this beautiful write Brenda - I have missed reading your poetry. Blessings, Jennifer. Brenda Chiri July 14, 2020 at 1:57 PM Thank you so much again Jennifer!;)

Richard Evans July 14, 2020 at 3:05 AM Indeed life is a struggle, a journey, a revelation, and yes sometimes torture. Lovely poem...............peace! Brenda Chiri July 14, 2020 at 1:56 PM Thank you Ricky much appreciated!;)

Andrea Dietrich July 12, 2020 at 3:34 PM Yes, things in life can be so hard, Brenda. For some, more so than for others. I love the angst in this. Brenda Chiri July 12, 2020 at 4:22 PM Thanks Andrea I appreciate that!;)

Gordon Mcconnell July 11, 2020 at 1:44 PM Such a great write Brenda, speaking with such desire and full of romantic tones. Hope you're well my blessed friend, Blessings always,Gordon Brenda Chiri July 11, 2020 at 2:32 PM All is well gordon thank you !;)

Regina Mcintosh July 10, 2020 at 6:09 AM This is a amazing write. I appreciate the heartbreak I hear and have felt so much pain in my own life that I've struggled to heal from that I can tell you have too. God bless your artistic talent and prayers for your beautiful soul Brenda Chiri July 10, 2020 at 9:49 AM Gina thank you and as I told pixie I appreciate your kind words!;)

Mystic Rose Rose July 9, 2020 at 7:47 PM Its not fun when we are bound by torture whether through remorse, loss, or missed opportunities, dear Brenda. I pray this is fictional and like W W, said, if unicorns to exist, then I'd wish they'd veer your way soon, lol, be good, stay safe, keep writing, you inspire me xo Brenda Chiri July 10, 2020 at 9:48 AM Pixie thank you so much! Your words are so uplifting and appreciated!;)

Winged Warrior July 9, 2020 at 5:24 AM Hey sissy, great write...of course, we want to see you forever young...I'll talk to the unicornies lol... love & hugs...bro bro :o) Brenda Chiri July 9, 2020 at 11:27 AM Haha dear bro bro as do I! Lol yes the unicorns I am sure can help!;) thank you dear brother!;)

Gershon Wolf July 8, 2020 at 9:11 PM Whoa! May that day (of you're being old) be a long time away... Images of a withered Gloria Swanson watching 9mm films of herself in her heyday, all alone in her basement theater in Beverly Hills, five decades later a faded, wizened siren... lol. (I actually saw such a sight on TV years ago). Cheers, Gershon

JC Brul July 8, 2020 at 1:55 PM A fine evocative piece! True love deserves to be chased..true love is happiness. This is very true poem dear Brenda. Brenda Chiri July 8, 2020 at 3:31 PM Thank you so much!;)

Caren Krutsinger July 8, 2020 at 10:03 AM Beautiful and ethereal Brenda. I enjoyed it. Brenda Chiri July 8, 2020 at 10:29 AM Ah my county friend how are you? I’m so glad you enjoyed it!;)

Tom Cunningham July 8, 2020 at 9:45 AM There's nothing sinful about wanting true love yet demons torment you twisting the truth. Well written Brenda, hope you're well Tom Brenda Chiri July 8, 2020 at 10:29 AM Tom thank you so very much! I am doing very well thank you! Hope all is well in your world too!;)