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Unsettled Souls

With no direction, Journey's end with little strength If doubt comes

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 2/18/2009 9:04:00 AM
There is a lot of depth in just three lines. The title captured my attention acts like a 4th line for this haiku. You may want to consider removing the comma at the end of line three. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us and for your kind words on my poem. Keep on writing! Have a nice day. Karen
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Date: 2/17/2009 6:45:00 AM
Nice write. it makes me think of a marathon runner who worked so hard to make it all the way to the finish line. After 26.2 miles they arrive but they have no time to feel overjoyed at their success, probably because they never bothered to drink water in the entire trip and so their body overheated and now they collapse from exhaustion, "with little strength". I think in my little metaphor the "doubt" you write about would be the exhaustion. I have no idea what the water would be though. Thanks.
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Date: 2/12/2009 7:23:00 AM
Smile~"Hello Blessed & Gifted Tyesha!!!"~So much truth within this write of yours~so much wisdom really!!!~ For when the days of trials and troubles come, without the power of Heavens helping hands, (The Holy Spirit of God) many will find it, that they shall not be able to stand~ and oh how sadly, what sorrow that may be for them then!!?~"Wonderful Write Dear Lady~Love. Always To You & Your Loves, John!":)
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Date: 2/11/2009 11:36:00 PM
Nice thoughts penned here Tyesha and thanks for your comments...Raul
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