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Author's Note:  This particular poem is a quite sad one.  I decided with this work to explore a relationship between a man and a woman that has gone terribly awry.  In this instance, the man in this poem is the one who has borne the sadness and rejection he's experienced in a tragic love relationship with a woman who he thought was very special to him.  The essence of the metaphor here is that this man really had, in the end, a very much one-sided love relationship where he was doing "all the giving" and his girlfriend (or even possibly wife) was doing "all the taking."  The roles, of course, can easily be reversed such that a women is deeply in love and is doing all the giving, while the man she loves is doing all the taking.  My attempt with this poem was to capture for a moment a picture of what some people go through and what they may think about when they are enmeshed in a relationship predicated upon "Unrequited Love."  It is indeed sad, but these particular negative relationship experiences do happen sometimes to men and women as an unfortunate dynamic of our greater human existence in society.  Sad this poem is, but I hope you find it of interest.  (Gary Bateman - November 1, 2014) (Rhymed Lyric)

Categories:  allegory, anger, betrayal, break up, depression, heartbroken, and imagery.

The love I felt exists no more
I can’t believe we’re no more
Darling how can this even be
Don’t you even care and see

I sleep at night in such hopeless torment
My soul inside crying tears of sad lament
I once felt at the very pinnacle of my life
Now I hang my head only in fear and strife

The feeling, passion, and warmth are now all gone
We had such fun in love and life, now that’s gone
My hopes and emotions are awash in this strife
My desires and dreams are gone now in my life 

I gave you all my love Darling straight from my heart
And you returned nothing Darling from the very start
My soul now cries so sadly in a most horrible hellish fire
Knowing my love remains unrequited and my soul on fire

The love I felt exists no more
I can’t believe we’re no more
Darling how can this even be
Don’t you even care and see

Gary Bateman, Copyright © All Rights Reserved, 
November 1, 2014 (Rhymed Lyric)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 11/5/2014 4:49:00 AM
haunting piece that is gut-wrenching and still so beautifully composed, gary... tremendously done!.. huggs
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/5/2014 4:15:00 PM
Thank You So Much Nette!! A sad piece indeed, but I'm glad you liked it!! Best Always, Gary
Date: 11/3/2014 6:12:00 PM
Indeed, quite sad, yet affective all the same. I can easily relate to this piece. Is is a beautiful verse. These trials with personal relationships can be a difficult change for us. It can degrade the mind, and depress the soul, but it may also build character if one allows. I like this poem - going to read more of your work soon! Always, Laura
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/4/2014 9:02:00 PM
Thanks Laura so much for your very timely observations here. I believe like you that in the end that one (man or woman) must seek to rebuild their character and self-worth and try to move on with their lives. If this isn't attempted the negative aspects will continue to challenge the mind and soul -- and not for the good. Best Always, Gary
Date: 11/2/2014 5:03:00 PM
Heartbreakimg and moves the reader's heart...Makes one feel that its He being there.When love is one sided it becomes too painful to bare.Awesome!
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/2/2014 5:40:00 PM
Thanks Charmaine!! IK always appreciate your comments!!These types of one-sided loves unfortunately do happen sometimes to people. Seeing your response here tells me I hit the nerve just right to evoke the pain, loss and negative emotion felt by my fictional character in this poem. Best Wishes Always, Gary
Date: 11/2/2014 4:54:00 PM
No greater love can one give than an unrequited love -- an agape love. Nicely done.
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Date: 11/2/2014 5:28:00 PM
David, Thanks for your comment here. You are certainly on target with the "agape love" observation. (I don't recall if I've been by to visit your poems yet. If not, I will certainly do so!!) Thanks David!! Best Wishes, Gary
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Date: 11/2/2014 5:22:00 PM
Thanks D!! I need to drop by to check out your latest writes. Yup -- this one is a sad one. Unfortunately, in the course of human relationships these particular ones do happen. At age 63 and having been married to the same wonderful woman for nearly 24 years I can look back at these troubling occurrences with a deeper look and understanding. Cheers XOXO, Gary
Date: 11/2/2014 3:09:00 PM
This is like the kind of poems I still write and have written for years sometimes. It sure touches ones heart to tears. A write many can relate too, more than half of the population of the world I believe. I do! Very sad poem but well penned my dear friend. Halloweeen is over, hope you had a blast in Germany. A 7 from me. Take care! Love and hugs! ;) xxx D.
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Date: 11/2/2014 5:23:00 PM
Thanks D!! I need to drop by to check out your latest writes. Yup -- this one is a sad one. Unfortunately, in the course of human relationships these particular ones do happen. At age 63 and having been married to the same wonderful woman for nearly 24 years I can look back at these troubling occurrences with a deeper look and understanding. Cheers XOXO, Gary
Date: 11/2/2014 6:59:00 AM
I've experienced unrequitted love too and im feeling your poem, its so beautiful.
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Date: 11/2/2014 9:16:00 AM
Hi Victoria, I am very glad you enjoyed my write here. I am so sorry to hear that you experienced this type of situation. It is an unfortunate aspect of some relationships. The main thing is to try to ensure that it doesn't occur again. I will drop by to check out your poetry too!! Best Wishes Always, Gary
Date: 11/1/2014 9:41:00 PM
this just pulled deeply i could feel tears wow gary truly i could feel deep pain reading this god bless dear pal outstanding piece of writing this is the first all day that really hit me golden pen
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/2/2014 8:59:00 AM
Thanks Liam!! Yes -- This one is a sad one. As I mentioned earlier, the first draft of this one came to me really fast. Unrequited love is indeed a very sad aspect of the human dynamic. Talk to you soon Mate!! Cheers, Gary
Date: 11/1/2014 5:57:00 PM
Gary, such a heart tugging, deeply moving poem. But you tell it like it is and the emotions come across through your writing, poignant and strong.
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Date: 11/1/2014 6:55:00 PM
Darlene, Thanks for your note and comment. I've got some more of these in the pipeline to come. I guess at age 63 now, I can look back at some of the situations I experienced and ones from others I knew and reflect on the pain and sorrow inflicted in relationships doomed for failure. If we could only go back to that younger age with what we know now. Best Always, Gary
Date: 11/1/2014 1:14:00 PM
Gary, you have a captivating style that authentically depicts the emotion and thus pulls effectively on the reader's own heart.. So well done here!
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/1/2014 6:57:00 PM
Dave, Thanks so much. I do appreciate your thoughts here. I will have some more of these in the future since I'm branching out more into the romance writes. Best Always!! Gary
Date: 11/1/2014 9:25:00 AM
I like how the first line relieves tension. The lamenting man is over the love too, because your first line states the love he felt exists no more. So the reader is expecting maybe a rant but not a depressive plea. It makes the following lines more expectant, the reader wants to see the put-down.
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/1/2014 7:00:00 PM
Dan, Thanks so much here for your review and wonderful comments and observation. My idea to write this one came to mind rather quickly and so I had to write while I got my uplink secured with Our Poetic Muse. I will be by to check out you works too. Thanks again . . . Cheers, Gary
Date: 11/1/2014 8:36:00 AM
Very well written poem Gary, sorry to say these things like this do happen in relationships, but it’s worse when children are involve. Children see what is going on in their parents life and it hurts there little heart because they love their parents so much. Love and hugs eve
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/1/2014 7:07:00 PM
Hello Eve, Thanks for your read and comments here. Yes -- I agree totally with what you say. When children are involved, all of the pain and suffering is magnified and quite terrible and sad for the children. I plan to have some more of these themes in the future. Glad you liked my poem here. All The Best, Gary
Date: 11/1/2014 8:20:00 AM
very good write Gary.
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Date: 11/1/2014 7:11:00 PM
Hello Jasmine . . . Thanks for the read and your comment here. I must drop by and check your poems too. Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary