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Unraveled Mind

The stitches begin to unravel
               The seams are tearing apart
                     Arteries bursting within a heart
                           Through insanity the mind travels

          Unable to grasp the sincerity
                Through a kaleidoscope of fears
                      Drowning within rivers of tears
                            Thoughts no longer have clarity

           Living like a garden vegetable
                       Dreaming of being an intellectual



                                      12/29/2017
          Written for contest: (5 words, 10 lines Rhyme)

                Placed 1st in Contest Results

Copyright © Brian Davey | Year Posted 2017

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Line Gauthier Date: 1/3/2018 3:45:00 PM Congrats on your win, Brian. Login to Reply Brian Davey Date: 1/6/2018 4:45:00 AM Thank you very much

Subimal Sinha-Roy Date: 12/31/2017 11:06:00 PM Congratulations, Brian on your fine win. Happy New Year. Login to Reply Brian Davey Date: 1/3/2018 7:33:00 PM Many Thanks

Janice Canerdy Date: 12/31/2017 9:44:00 PM Excellent, Brian! Congrats and happy New Year! Janice Login to Reply Brian Davey Date: 1/3/2018 7:32:00 PM Thank you Janice

Carole Duet Date: 12/31/2017 8:44:00 PM Wow, Brian! What a great write and congrats on your win and Happy New Year. Here's hoping 2018 will be better than 2017. Cheers! Login to Reply Brian Davey Date: 1/1/2018 8:41:00 AM Thank you and we all hope 2018 will be better!

Susan Ashley Date: 12/31/2017 8:37:00 PM A brilliant write Brian. Deep with great imagery. Congratulations on your well deserved first place win.. Happy New Year! ~Susan Login to Reply Brian Davey Date: 1/1/2018 8:40:00 AM Thank you Susan I am glad you enjoyed it

Kim Rodrigues Date: 12/31/2017 8:32:00 PM Congrats on your top win, Brian! Nicely done! Login to Reply Brian Davey Date: 12/31/2017 11:33:00 PM Thank you Kim

Beautiful Scars Date: 12/31/2017 8:20:00 PM wow Brian, I am shocked you have no comments yet! This was amazing. Loved the flow, rhythm and rhyme scheme. Well deserved first place, thank you and congrats :) -luloo Login to Reply Brian Davey Date: 12/31/2017 11:32:00 PM Thank you again Lauren for another great contest and I am ecstatic about my Placement!