Brian Davey Poet Rhyme

Unraveled Mind

The stitches begin to unravel
               The seams are tearing apart
                     Arteries bursting within a heart
                           Through insanity the mind travels

          Unable to grasp the sincerity
                Through a kaleidoscope of fears
                      Drowning within rivers of tears
                            Thoughts no longer have clarity

           Living like a garden vegetable
                       Dreaming of being an intellectual



                                      12/29/2017
          Written for contest: (5 words, 10 lines Rhyme)

                Placed 1st in Contest Results

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Line Gauthier January 3, 2018 at 3:45 PM Congrats on your win, Brian. Brian Davey January 6, 2018 at 4:45 AM Thank you very much

Subimal Sinha-Roy December 31, 2017 at 11:06 PM Congratulations, Brian on your fine win. Happy New Year. Brian Davey January 3, 2018 at 7:33 PM Many Thanks

Janice Canerdy December 31, 2017 at 9:44 PM Excellent, Brian! Congrats and happy New Year! Janice Brian Davey January 3, 2018 at 7:32 PM Thank you Janice

Carole Duet December 31, 2017 at 8:44 PM Wow, Brian! What a great write and congrats on your win and Happy New Year. Here's hoping 2018 will be better than 2017. Cheers! Brian Davey January 1, 2018 at 8:41 AM Thank you and we all hope 2018 will be better!

Susan Ashley December 31, 2017 at 8:37 PM A brilliant write Brian. Deep with great imagery. Congratulations on your well deserved first place win.. Happy New Year! ~Susan Brian Davey January 1, 2018 at 8:40 AM Thank you Susan I am glad you enjoyed it

Kim Rodrigues December 31, 2017 at 8:32 PM Congrats on your top win, Brian! Nicely done! Brian Davey December 31, 2017 at 11:33 PM Thank you Kim

Beautiful Scars December 31, 2017 at 8:20 PM wow Brian, I am shocked you have no comments yet! This was amazing. Loved the flow, rhythm and rhyme scheme. Well deserved first place, thank you and congrats :) -luloo Brian Davey December 31, 2017 at 11:32 PM Thank you again Lauren for another great contest and I am ecstatic about my Placement!