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If there were no times 
We would mime in dark of blind 
Proofed sea brine as lime 

-November 05, 2018 Chattogram
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Enriquez Avatar
November 10, 2018 at 7:32 PM
Dear Mahtab: Nicely done. Leon
Dietrich Avatar
November 6, 2018 at 6:24 PM
I agree with Caren on that middle line. A very creative senryu.
Wolf Avatar
November 6, 2018 at 1:04 PM
I second Caren's comment below. Evocative imagery, my friend. Best wishes, gw
Krutsinger Avatar
November 5, 2018 at 7:23 AM
"mime in dark of blind" - wow! This is a terrific feeling brought on by great imagery.
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