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After winning one of his competitions TOM WOODY suggested  I might try expanding the poem.  I am not sure what he meant, but i tuned in the mood and here is an expansion of the first poem Unloved. Hope it meets with approval.. 

UNLOVED 2 (EXPANDED)
                                                           
The stinging is particularly painful today, 
Needles of sharp cold burning blood stab and sear my heart
The jabbing jagged thousand little holes stay
And begin again tomorrow to flay each part.

Rejection is a drowning drunk
Gasping with each mouthful of pride 
Another trophy now lies lifeless and sunk
Another screaming day that died.

For all the steaming dreaming part
I played in the capture of my choice
Flat failure is the guide of my loveless dart
And a choking silence is my only voice.

When the punished pillows murder cry
Silent clocks and secret swish
Of thick dark failing falling curtains fringed with notoriety
Rip the seams of a ragged wish

Until the spleen sheds its poison deep below
Swimming into the fathom of night and day
Where no tender fingers reach my depth
And only the claw grasps its prey.

Liar lord of loyalty the infidel of opera cloak
Sweep and cover a collapsing shroud
Leaving only the tomb and the weeping womb
For the remnants of the uncertain crowd.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 5/22/2024 7:59:00 PM
Awesome. Miss you here. But then, I'm not around much lately either. When I am I always appreciate your stuff. Best to you.
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Date: 1/15/2024 5:32:00 AM
Magnificent Janine! This is your niche, I think
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Date: 1/15/2024 7:13:00 AM
Yay! thank you tom so much for your comments. Glad you like it. Poe and Plath must be on my wavelength ha ha.
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