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I woke up that day with tears in my eyes,
after I heard about your father's demise.
Guess you've never understood,
the point of being his blood.

I remember when your mother left,
how he was totally bereft.
Ran off with the man next door,
not once did he call her a whore.
Not once did your mother call,
too busy having a ball.
Forgot about her only child,
to live a life fun and wild.

He knew he had to be strong,
so the world would do you no wrong.
Every night he held you tight,
his eyes your guiding light.
Every time you would cry,
he would kiss those tears dry.
Worked three jobs so you had the best,
not once did he fail in your request.
He suppressed all his sorrows deep inside,
he was broken but never did he subside.

Single he remained for the rest of his life,
dedicated to you, so you would not face strife.
Yet you too, decided to walk away,
tell me what led you astray?
You called him a religious bore,
when you ran out of that door.
He had your best interests at heart,
but you belittled him for not being smart.

Then you wonder why he finally broke,
all that stress gave him a deadly stroke.
Now you stand there with your unfaithful mother,
with someone who is young enough to be your brother.
Crocodile tears stream from your artificial face,
as his coffin is lowered into his final resting place.
How ironic it has started to pour with rain,
maybe it's God washing away all of his pain.

Don't come running to me for sympathy,
I have no time for those with no dignity.
All his sacrifices now you seem to realise,
but he can't hear you, it's too late to apologise.
Because of you he lived a life heartbroken,
forever you will regret those words unspoken.

P.S
If you think his inheritance will help your austerity,
he wasn't that stupid, he left it all to charity!

The Silent One
16 February 2018

Based on a true story




Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 11/16/2019 9:59:00 AM
Man, oh man ... what a slam! I really dig this slash-n-sass flow, SO. You are one heavy hitter Truth ballplaya. Love the grit and the wit. Cool breeze poetry is always refreshing to a parched muse soul. Love and joy forever.
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Date: 11/12/2019 4:58:00 PM
Such a strong self-sacrificing father even in the midst of all the pain. If only the child had realized it. You are a great story-teller. This was captivating.
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Date: 6/21/2018 8:10:00 AM
Wonderfully written Silent One, love the p.s. line, the ungrateful should not benefit fom their cruelty. Hugs
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Date: 4/8/2018 8:27:00 AM
Great poem! (I go for rhyme). Some folks should take this lesson to heart
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Date: 3/22/2018 5:52:00 AM
A very strong and touching poem.. It pours ache into the heart and brings tears to eyes. . Nothing hurts most than an ungrateful child. Great write! Thank you! Stay blessed.
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Date: 3/17/2018 4:34:00 PM
But you still have not told me which poems I never saw. Let me try on page 2!!
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Silent One
Date: 3/18/2018 10:31:00 AM
I have no clue which ones they are..
Date: 3/7/2018 7:36:00 AM
As soon as I stopped what I thought I was doing. All the signs been there.
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Silent One
Date: 3/18/2018 10:31:00 AM
yeah.. they always are..
Date: 3/5/2018 8:22:00 AM
Life is not fair and this world is truly dark my friend-thus the truth in the old saying, "no good deed goes unpunished". I lived some of what that man did, yet , my daughter that I did that for thankfully has never abandoned me. She often tells me of her appreciation. A truly tremendous poem -one that will stand the test of time! A fav..
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Date: 2/28/2018 7:00:00 AM
Oh it s really beautiful, the fact that it s based on a true story made it even more touching, yeah you re right, the father could have remarried, left her like her mother did, could have fulfill his own desires but he choose to raise her and it s so sad that she realize it when it was all gone wellmy grandfather did the same thing, he left my father and my grandmother when my father was two and came back after 16 years and there in England he remarried, so my grandmother riased my father alone
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Date: 2/27/2018 3:27:00 PM
gosh, I keep clicking on poems but they are ones Have already seen. Can you think of one of yours I may not have seen? Anyway, hope to see some new ones soon from you!
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Silent One
Date: 2/27/2018 3:28:00 PM
Awwww shows what an excellent friend you are and have always supported my simple words... Not only a great poet but also a lovely lady..
Date: 2/26/2018 1:11:00 PM
This is truly an amazing piece, my friend and excellently told! Unfortunately, I know of many similar stories about ungrateful children. But our hero did the right thing in the end because he gave her "zero" which is exactly what she deserved! BRAVO! Hugs and best wishes. Pandita
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Silent One
Date: 2/27/2018 3:52:00 PM
Thank you Pandita..
Date: 2/22/2018 8:41:00 PM
Such heartbreaking circumstances for this dedicated man to have been abandoned twice in life by the two people who should have loved him most. Your emotions of anger are scathingly expressed but so are your warm feelings of admiration, love and respect of this man, your friend and maybe father figure.. A beautiful poem from your heart, Silent One - I'm so sorry for your loss. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
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Silent One
Date: 2/27/2018 3:53:00 PM
Thank you for your kind words and sentiments Susan..
Date: 2/20/2018 6:56:00 PM
Ohhhh...This is extremely heartbreaking and while I am saddened that it's a true story, I bet it happens frequently. Horrible. Glad he left her NOTHING.
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Silent One
Date: 2/21/2018 9:49:00 AM
Sadly it happens to so many people.. thanks Rhoda..
Date: 2/19/2018 7:51:00 PM
Silent One, a deep pane one feels for this gentleman. To loose both of the people who are most important in your life through mere selfishness.
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Silent One
Date: 2/21/2018 9:50:00 AM
Thank you, I think everyone feels for him and they did...
Date: 2/19/2018 1:01:00 PM
wow, what a GREAT ending on this poem, Silent One. you showed forth quite the storytelling skill there! I enjoyed this read. It's so sad how people can treat family.
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Silent One
Date: 2/21/2018 9:51:00 AM
Thank you Andrea..
Date: 2/18/2018 6:32:00 PM
Always like it when someone's around to keep it real. You told the story very well and creatively.
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Silent One
Date: 2/21/2018 9:53:00 AM
Thank you Susan..
Date: 2/17/2018 9:48:00 PM
Alas...we made a "civilised" society but still wondering why we stayed savages everyday of our life. Mistake are made but rarely are they repaired. A heartbreaking story my friend. I'm not sympa with the victim but with the victimisers who would suffer for rest of their lives. Well penned. :)
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Silent One
Date: 2/21/2018 9:59:00 AM
Thank you Sunita..
Date: 2/17/2018 7:28:00 PM
S1: Unfortunately, this wonderful piece describes one of a million similar stories playing out across the country. Our culture seems to fail so many folks so miserably. Thanks for sharing these emotions with all of us on the soup. oldbuck
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Silent One
Date: 2/21/2018 10:00:00 AM
You are right my friend.. Thank you..
Date: 2/17/2018 2:33:00 PM
Oh Yes!! The pen is mightier than the sword.
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Silent One
Date: 2/21/2018 10:00:00 AM
Indeed..
Date: 2/17/2018 12:01:00 PM
Very moving and well-written, S.O. I REALLY love the PS! Janice
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Silent One
Date: 2/17/2018 12:03:00 PM
Thanks, I first I thought you meant Poetry Soup, lol.
Date: 2/16/2018 10:29:00 PM
A wonderful write, I can't understand a parent leaving their children behind and so many do it.. I know That I can't do it .......
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Silent One
Date: 2/17/2018 12:21:00 PM
I can't understand either.. Thank you Eve..
Date: 2/16/2018 9:23:00 PM
A sad narrative on the deplorable way we people treat the ones who loved us unconditionally. Great truths and embarrassment for our species.
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Silent One
Date: 2/17/2018 12:22:00 PM
Yes as it happens so often.. Thank you James..
Date: 2/16/2018 7:28:00 PM
Wow! Especially... a true story! So many complicated emotions. Life is too short to play games! Really well written!
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Silent One
Date: 2/17/2018 12:23:00 PM
Thank you Kim..
Date: 2/16/2018 5:01:00 PM
Oh wow, this is a tragedy written in such emotive, direct tones. I am so sad for the father, though he had the last word. Well written, Silent...had my attention from beginning to end!
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Silent One
Date: 2/16/2018 5:10:00 PM
Thank you Laura, the sad reality is that it happens so much and when I see them crying, I think to myself, why are you crying now.. its wrong and we all make mistakes, but this guy was treated so bad, I did not include all the details...
Date: 2/16/2018 4:55:00 PM
Awesome, beautifully narrated poem but... Thank you, Lord for that last line !!!!! A pet peeve of mine. Bravo, exquisite delivery, SO.
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Silent One
Date: 2/16/2018 4:57:00 PM
Thank you, yeah it is sad when people who do not deserve anything get anothers assets..
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