Unexpected Twist

Silence shutters in through the fresh air
streaked windows painted in despair
star struck visions seek the light
hidden inside the distant night
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Smoke-filled eyes blink
gasps trying to think
a whisper heard
no just a bird
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so missed
a twist
sighs
why
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Yvonne Avatar
October 17, 2016 at 8:16 PM
Wow, a brilliant shape. I want to try a really complex shape but I haven't thought of one yet. I did the tulip under the evergreen but like a really well done guitar with a great poem to match or a piano...just really complex shapes...where the shape is really really well done and the poem even better. Oh well there is no crime in dreaming. A Fav.
Smith Avatar
October 17, 2016 at 9:03 PM
Thank you my friend, I'm just dipping my toes in the water.
Vaso Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 11:12 PM
Already one on a pretty feather, I am impressed!
Smith Avatar
October 17, 2016 at 9:01 PM
Thank you Arthur...lol
Allison Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 3:07 PM
This is brilliantly constructed Tim I am going to have to try this one day:-) hugs Jan xx
Smith Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 3:59 PM
Thanks Jan...might try something more creative next time
Green Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 1:41 PM
Very cool. I like this a lot. This doesn't seem like it would easy to do, but you sure made it look that way.
Smith Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 3:03 PM
Thanks Chris. I was listening to Coldplay and it started to take shape itself so I went with it.
Sands Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 1:27 PM
Good one. I like that!
Smith Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 3:01 PM
Thanks Heidi
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