Underwater

Im under water 
and it feels like a slaughter 
the killing of my precious air 
day dreaming that someones there 
Hoping and praying for anyone 
To come around and be the one 
to rescue me, but I am alone 
My soul took off from my body, it has flown 
from this deoxygenated world to mine 
I am now feeling shivers down my spine
I feel the trembling of my lungs 
The absence of the life my body longs 
for and craves, the life it needs 
I am frozen in time as my nose bleeds 
My stomach fills with acid, water 
begins to sink into my airless lungs 
i think people are yelling with cut off tongues 
theyre muted, they cant be heard 
I begin to feel weightless like a bird 
I think Im starting to drown 
I continue to sink and go down 
deeper under this water 
that feels like a slaughter
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May 21, 2016 at 10:13 AM
Marcos Estrada, welcome to poetry soup, well penned. Enjoyed reading your thoughts and words today. *SKAT*
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April 6, 2016 at 5:37 AM
Hi Marcos, Nice first post. Welcome to poetry soup.Wish a successful journey ahead..........hugs
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April 5, 2016 at 4:52 PM
Marcos, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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April 5, 2016 at 2:36 PM
Amassing verses , feelings and thoughts in the hands of hope. Congrat.
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