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Undecided

Your heart is tardy,
hardly used except to whisper 
words of courteous affection.

Passion takes a backseat with your
carefully selected styles of self-protection.
'I love you' hardly ever leaves your lips.

Is it fear of letting go that stills your
soul, or the fear you'll get too close
that keeps you undecided?

Copyright © Keith Bickerstaffe | Year Posted 2015

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Casarah Nance Date: 12/30/2015 6:50:00 PM Well done, this asks the reader to examine themselves as the poem directs them to, and opens up opportunity to be honest with themselves. I enjoyed :) Login to Reply Keith Bickerstaffe Date: 12/30/2015 11:58:00 PM Precisely... thanks for your perceptive remarks! Best wishes, Keith

Dalia Shahein Date: 12/30/2015 5:56:00 PM I'm glad I've stopped by to read it cause it's really an remarkable poem...hugs / / :) dalia Login to Reply Keith Bickerstaffe Date: 12/30/2015 6:41:00 PM You are too kind! Best wishes, Keith

Ilene Bauer Date: 12/30/2015 4:32:00 PM i'm glad you mentioned the "tardy - hardly" connection, which works so beautifully here, keith. your use of alliteration is also spot-on. ~ let me take this opportunity to wish you a happy and healthy new year... Login to Reply Keith Bickerstaffe Date: 12/30/2015 4:36:00 PM ...and the same to you my dear! Thanks for mentioning the tardy/hardly thing and also the alliteration. I'm quite proud of that! Thanks so much. Best wishes, Keith

Gary Gene Linney Date: 12/30/2015 3:06:00 PM I like this very much Keith, that first line is suberb and is not let down by what follows, excellent writing, word perfect I believe:) Login to Reply Gary Gene Linney Date: 12/30/2015 3:40:00 PM Yes, I like it too, it is as if it commands a longer pause after tardy. Keith Bickerstaffe Date: 12/30/2015 3:14:00 PM I like the way 'tardy' is picked up by 'hardly,' the very next word. Thank you for you kind words... I am most grateful. Best wishes, Keith