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Umbra of Night

I lie with shadows past the midnight hours wondering . . . wondering. . . when will I ever sleep? Something gnaws at me; at times it devours. It devours the dreams I hope to dream. Lyrics of some song or nothing-thoughts seem insistent on lodging in my mind – where they creep. My soul yearns to slumber, but inside I’m reeling. The nothing-thoughts persist although they are not my plight! What keeps me from my dreams is a feeling. It’s kin to dread, and I lie in my bed like a leaf swept by an inner wind-force; that feeling is a thief robbing me of precious sleep in the umbra of night. Jan. 1, 2018 for Lu Loo's Rhyme Time 7- Deep And Dark Poetry Contest Theme #5: Umbra of Night using rhyme scheme: A-B-A-C-C-B D-E-D-F-F-E

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Date: 1/16/2019 3:13:00 PM
Well written poem on sleep, one of my problems . Congratulations on your win, Andrea! Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 1/16/2019 10:00:00 AM
Congrats on your win Andrea..
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Date: 1/15/2019 5:38:00 AM
Your trouble sleeping inspired a great write, Andrea. Congratulations on your win in Lu Loo's contest! Best wishes, Carolyn
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Date: 1/14/2019 4:22:00 PM
Beautiful and deep, Andrea! Congrats on your First Place win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 1/14/2019 10:57:00 AM
I had a feeling I would see thus at the top of the winner's list Andrea. Congratulations on your honors and for the other top wins I see you also got. I already read them so I won't go back to each one but please know I am aware of your wonderful wins and Kudos! xxoo
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Date: 1/2/2019 11:17:00 PM
This is so deep, Andrea. Lovely write. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 1/2/2019 7:34:00 PM
I love the way this ends: "I lie in my bed like a leaf swept by an inner wind-force; that feeling is a thief robbing me of precious sleep in the umbra of night." Good luck.
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Date: 1/2/2019 4:00:00 PM
A beautifully atmospheric piece, Andrea It reflects and expresses that almost dream like state of drifting thoughts before sleep comes. Well constructed to conform with the required pattern.
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Date: 1/1/2019 11:36:00 PM
A knowing description of sleepless nights Andrea. Written to perfection! xxoo
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Date: 1/1/2019 9:59:00 PM
Nicely done, Andrea!
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Date: 1/1/2019 6:24:00 PM
Wow - Andrea. Awesome poem.
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Date: 1/1/2019 5:52:00 PM
Your poem flows in dark and deep--apt for the contest theme. Many can relate to the sleepless anguish..fictional or not. Best for a win, Andrea.
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Date: 1/1/2019 5:40:00 PM
Thanks Andrea, I've learned my first new word of the year umbra I'll have to include it in a poem one day. Can relate to the imagery of sleepless nights had issues since hubby had his cancer surgery:-(at least I can get up in the night and pen my simple poopy poems lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/1/2019 5:44:00 PM
I mixed in my dizzy feeling in the poem as the wind-force! It's such a weird feeling!!! (by the way, i had to look up umbra too. I suspected it had to do with shadows but had to be sure!) LOL on the poopy poems. I have one coming soon for the Baby face contest. haha

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