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Premiere Contest Winnerugly gray rock -

an ugly gray rock, so I kicked it along
amused by my memories, humming a song
it was jagged and rough - I gave it no mind
and punted it thrice, then left it behind …

I changed up my hum and walked on alone
not thinking it special, (it WAS just a stone)
yet the farther I got from where it had been
the more I considered that "plain" rock
       again

something about its proportions or form
contrasted just slightly, was not quite the
       norm
the way that it tumbled, or lay there, just SO
or maybe the way it had bounced off my
       toe

whatever it was, I could not quite discern
but decided right then, it was worth a
       return
so, I spun myself 'round, headed back to
       that spot
still not sure of WHY - just a feeling I got

but when I returned, it had broken in two -
an incredible OPAL flamed red, green and
       blue!
scant had I known just what "ugly" could
       hold -
all the prismatic colors that smoldered,
       untold!

   well …

I couldn't help think that a lesson was there
of the plain folks we see, that we pass,
       unaware
for they are more precious than any gray
       stone
with such wonders inside - yet we leave
       them alone

perhaps if we gave them a wink or a grin
we might find the bright of their beauty
       WITHIN
the colors that light their charisma and
       grace
the complexion of charms that don’t show
       on a face

the places they’ve been or the roads they
       have run
their moonlight romances and days in the
       sun
the wealth of their spirit, their talents and
       rage
they’ve a story to tell, if we’d just turn the
       page

so, I keep in my pocket, a piece of that rock
to help me recall what I learned on that walk
not to take "plain" for granted, or push folks
       aside
but instead, look for sparks of their fires …

   deep INSIDE.






~ 1st Place ~  in the "Overlooked Beauty" Poetry Contest, Jesse Rowe, Judge & Sponsor.
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Cohen Avatar
January 15, 2020 at 5:34 PM
Great message and poem.
Barden Avatar
January 16, 2020 at 4:14 PM
Thank you so kindly, Eric ... much appreciated!
Agustin Avatar
February 9, 2019 at 7:03 AM
Wow! Congratulations. Thanks for sharing your wisdom gems thru your poetry. God bless you.
Barden Avatar
January 16, 2020 at 4:15 PM
Many kind thanks, Beata - blessings! :o) <3
Allison Avatar
February 8, 2019 at 5:42 PM
dropping back with my congrats Greg:-) hugs Jan xx
Barden Avatar
January 16, 2020 at 4:17 PM
Thank you so much, Jan!
Johnson Avatar
February 8, 2019 at 4:35 PM
Hi, Gregory. I must say that this is a great piece of work. Congrats.
Barden Avatar
January 16, 2020 at 4:17 PM
That's very kind, Curtis, thank you! :o)
Canerdy Avatar
February 8, 2019 at 1:54 PM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win, Gregory. LOVE IT! Janice
Barden Avatar
January 16, 2020 at 4:18 PM
Thank you so much, Janice - blessings! :o) <3
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 8, 2019 at 8:49 AM
Aw, fantastic poem Greg! Congratulations on your win! A fave for me <3 xomo!
Barden Avatar
January 16, 2020 at 4:18 PM
Many thanks, Maureen - glad to see you still "around" ... but then, this was from last year, wasn't it? ;o) <3
Gauthier Avatar
February 7, 2019 at 11:38 PM
Wow - Beautiful. Awesome poem, Gregory. Awesome lesson. Congrats on your most deserving gold medal win. Bravo.
Barden Avatar
January 16, 2020 at 4:19 PM
That's very kind of you, Line, thank you.
Rowe Avatar
February 7, 2019 at 10:54 PM
Congrats on your first place finish in my contest. I loved the story development. This was exactly what I was looking for in my contest.
Barden Avatar
January 16, 2020 at 4:19 PM
Many kind thanks, Jesse, I'm very pleased you found this worthy of placement. Blessings, Friend! :o)
Dietrich Avatar
April 22, 2017 at 7:27 PM
oh YES< there is rare fire inside of so many people that we can't always see. VERY nice analogy, Greg!
Barden Avatar
April 22, 2017 at 11:18 PM
Thank you so very much, Andrea ... very kind words from a poet I greatly admire! Blessings! :-)
White Avatar
April 22, 2017 at 10:43 AM
You don't get enough comments and views for a poet so accomplished... This is a gem of a poem, and even if you hadn't added the last stanza, your message would have been abundantly clear. And your rhyme, it's impeccable, as is your style. A 7 from me.
Barden Avatar
April 22, 2017 at 11:17 PM
Thank you so very much, Darren, that means a great deal coming from a writer as accomplished as yourself ... very kind of you, my friend, and so appreciated!
Allison Avatar
April 20, 2017 at 3:32 AM
what a fabulous message and WOW what a find - I have a necklace with a small 'black' opal from lightning ridge but it pales into insignificance to your incredible find and only goes to prove the beauty is in the inside and we need to look beyond what is on the outside:-) hugs Jan xx
Barden Avatar
April 20, 2017 at 3:18 PM
Thank you so very much, Jan - so much in our lives we take for granted, or judge from the outside alone ... Opals are the perfect example of how much wonder can be found on the inside! Blessings! :-)
Kinch  Avatar
April 20, 2017 at 1:36 AM
An inspiring message in this fabulous write Greg, I love it, seven+++
Barden Avatar
April 20, 2017 at 1:47 AM
Thank you so much, Elizabeth - what a wonderful comment! Blessings! :-)
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