Black Eyed Susan Poet Senryu

Two Worlds Colliding

ONE five-minute break
at work playing games, mistake
exaggerated

butterfly dreams cease
cocoon gone in a heartbeat
catepillar weeps


8/5/12
For Russell's "Two Worlds Colliding" contest
Black Eyed Susan

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Carol Sunshine Brown October 19, 2012 at 7:52 AM Thanking you today for your comments on my writing Susan. I hope you have a very pleasant weekend and I wish to see more of your work next week. Love, Carol XXXX

Matthew Anish September 11, 2012 at 1:41 PM What are the two worlds colliding? I like this work but feel some explaining is needed here. Let me know what the two worlds are! Peace & love Matthew Anish

Sara Kendrick August 18, 2012 at 2:20 PM Congrats on your winning work..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown August 16, 2012 at 6:02 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win in Russell's "Two Worlds Colliding" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Poet Destroyer A August 15, 2012 at 11:43 PM SWEET SUSAN, a warm congratulations in Russell Sivey's "Two Worlds Colliding " contest. had fun catching up with all the winners xox~ PD

Andrea Dietrich August 14, 2012 at 7:50 PM Belated congratulations, Susan. I remember this creative poem from earlier. Hope to see an email from you tonight!

David Williams August 12, 2012 at 2:36 AM Susan congrats on your great win....will email some today..David

Olusegun Arowolo August 11, 2012 at 5:54 PM Superb write,Susan.Great job,nice going.,Congrats on your win..

Kim Merryman August 11, 2012 at 4:08 PM Interesting contrasts. Congrats on your win, Susan! Love, Kim

Joseph May August 11, 2012 at 8:57 AM great write...congrats on your win Susan

Andrea Dietrich August 8, 2012 at 3:06 PM Susan, this is sure creative. I really like that second one and the metaphor of the butterfly and caterpillar. thanks for my win. I'm glad you liked what i wrote. LUv, andrea

Justin Bordner August 6, 2012 at 10:45 PM This elicits thoughts of perished innocence - I can relate to this sentiment at this moment - thank you Susan - J.A.B.

Sara Kendrick August 6, 2012 at 2:49 PM Ahh!..Enjoyed this creative and expressive work..Thanks for stopping by my blog..Hubby still doing good..Some pain but not too bad..Sara

Anne-Lise Andresen August 5, 2012 at 1:23 PM Good writing by a skilled lady, and a win for the contest. - Have a beautiful new week B.E.S. - oxox love // Anne-Lise :)

David Williams August 5, 2012 at 12:43 PM Susan I like your take on this one, good luck..David will email you tomo.