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Twenty Percent

If I had a sad broken heart Not because you died dear But that you chose another bride Who's so limited I fear She posseses only twenty Percent and I eighty Chosen in my youth gifted blessed God prepared me for thee Now that I'm aged unable to work Not able to serve you You seek a twenty percent girl Unintelligent shrew Wish you well in your endeavor You're getting just desserts Twenty percent's offerings small So small just miniskirt
This one is based on 80/20 principle This is not an original idea I heard it in a sermon by T.D.Jakes When a person marries, gets a new job, or a new home, etc.., everything is great. Then the new wears off and fault finding begins..Nothing is a hundred percent usually about twenty percent imperfections.. Thanks for the challenge: HGarvey Daniel Esquire Contest entry....

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 7/24/2015 3:14:00 PM
Sara, congratulations on your Broken Heart win. **SKAT**
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Date: 7/24/2015 3:14:00 PM
:) :):)
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Date: 7/24/2015 1:10:00 AM
Congrats on ur superb winning work Sara!
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Date: 7/9/2012 9:21:00 AM
Wow! You said it all, Sara. I'm glad you told me about this one. We 80 percenters sometimes get cast aside as we get older or the infatuation wears off. This is likely to happen to the fella I told you about. Excellent message and very cleverly written. Wishing you success in HG's contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/7/2012 8:04:00 PM
There's to her. Keep writing.
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Date: 7/6/2012 12:33:00 PM
Loved it, one of your best I believe
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Date: 7/5/2012 10:29:00 PM
Dear Sara, I have added 11 more entrees to my Contest so You should be able to enter YOUR POEM 20 Percent Thank-YOU for supporting my Contest With LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER, YOUR Eternal Liege...Harry
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Date: 7/5/2012 11:59:00 AM
great thought Sara,so true
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Date: 7/5/2012 11:20:00 AM
What a grandiose write my friend! I've heard the 80/20 rule before, thought I don't remember what it was referring to at the time! Thanks for elaborating what it meant for us! Your poem says it all, Great Work!!
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Date: 7/5/2012 10:18:00 AM
impactful and full of wisdom, sara... i bow to thee!... win it!..:) huggs!
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Date: 7/5/2012 9:29:00 AM
loved reading your verse today~ have a blessed day Sara, much love, Cindy
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Date: 7/5/2012 7:26:00 AM
Sara, i'd say you gave this 100%...David
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