Cheryl Hoffman Poet Rhyme

Tunnel Vision

As I watched the sweat roll down
past my chin and down my sides
I stayed determined to keep up
my stamina for this one track ride

I pumped the handcar trolley
through the tunnels twists and turns
keeping my eyes focused
although at times they stung and burned

As I pumped I noticed
my hair go from brown to gray
but that didn't deter me
going down the tunnel track each day

Elation and adrenaline I felt
approaching the light at the very end
and jumping off the handcar trolley
I retired round the bend


4-26-18

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David William Breidenthal May 28, 2018 at 9:05 AM Awesome poem...what an adventure!! (: Cheryl Hoffman May 28, 2018 at 6:16 PM Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit JW; glad you like the adventure!~Che :)

Ravi Sathasivam May 2, 2018 at 11:57 PM Excellent. Well penned. All the best. Cheryl Hoffman May 3, 2018 at 8:36 AM Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Ravi; glad you liked it!~Che :)

Charles Messina April 30, 2018 at 9:54 PM As we age in life, it seems like every turn and twist through the tunnel we get another grey hair. Enjoyed the ride on the handcar trolley, especially because I've never been on one.(lol) Good luck in the contest Che! ...All the best...Charlie Cheryl Hoffman May 1, 2018 at 8:42 AM Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Charlie; glad you enjoyed the ride which I've never been on either...just in my imagination~Che :)

Sara Kendrick April 29, 2018 at 8:04 AM Enjoyed reading this one. It has good flow and rhythm. We do put a lot into life and it does wear us down. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara Cheryl Hoffman April 30, 2018 at 8:20 AM Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Sara; glad you enjoyed it and your very welcome!~Che :)

Mystic Rose Rose April 29, 2018 at 6:09 AM This is an original, I love it Cheryl. Love the part where the hair changes color, gradually it seems in the stark reality of life and death. Thanks for the sharing gl in the contest Cheryl Hoffman April 30, 2018 at 8:20 AM Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Pixie Dust; glad you enjoyed it!~Che :)

John Gondolf April 27, 2018 at 11:39 AM Nicely written, Cheryl, I am starting to think about taking the leap myself. John Cheryl Hoffman April 28, 2018 at 7:41 PM I am going to try to hang in there till I turn 66 1/2 which is 6 years from now (aaargh!) Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit John and good luck if you take the leap!~Che :)

Susan Gentry April 26, 2018 at 10:37 PM I so like this! Excellent for the contest. Good luck. Cheryl Hoffman April 27, 2018 at 8:23 AM Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Susan; really appreciate it!~Che :)