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Trouble Sleeping

lying in my bed 
sleep beckons, then slips away -
sandman is on strike

8/7/21
(fiction)

for Line Gauthier's Bite Size Poem #16

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Paula Goldsmith

October 14, 2021 at 3:49 PM

Your "trouble sleeping" is a fun write. Love your line, "sandman is on strike." Have a blessed day................

Sara Kendrick

October 11, 2021 at 1:17 PM

I have those nights and it is not fun. I hope that it gets better for you. Your visit to my page was encouraging. Sara

Harry Horsman

October 4, 2021 at 6:56 PM

So glad to find this poetic gem.

Jack Horne

September 4, 2021 at 8:27 AM

LOL, yes, I know how you feel with that sandman being on strike

Shirley Hawkins

August 30, 2021 at 4:21 PM

I think my Sandman is always on strike... or he has run out of sand... Clever Senryu. A winner for sure Kim...

Christuraj Alex

August 26, 2021 at 10:48 PM

A beautiful Senryu. A very creative one. Sandman is on strike give a very witty end.

Anitha Jayasankar

August 18, 2021 at 12:59 AM

I can relate to this dear Kim... So beautifully penned... Hearty congrats... Hugs... ~ Ani

Sandra Adams

August 17, 2021 at 8:09 AM

i despise nights such as this...i try so many different things to drift off... one i heard recently on the radio... go through the alphabet and think of 3 letter words for each letter... if i make it through them i then do 4 letter words, eventually i drift off... good write that most can relate to :) hugs

Andrea Dietrich

August 12, 2021 at 8:14 PM

oh YES, I know this one all right!!!

Brian Sambourne

August 11, 2021 at 1:43 PM

Funny + most creative. That last line is a zinger. Congratulations! All the best, Brian

Carol Mitra

August 10, 2021 at 9:22 PM

Oh ho...the last line said it all Kim....Congrats on your win :)

Paula Goldsmith

August 10, 2021 at 9:14 AM

Congratulations on your win. Oh no, "sandman is on strike." What a cute/fun write. Have a blessed day with your win...............

Gary Radice

August 9, 2021 at 1:07 PM

Yes..been there many a time when the sandman's been asleep on the job. Great senryu! Cheers - Gary

Panagiota Romios

August 8, 2021 at 9:42 PM

LOL.This is such a fun Senryu! Enjoyed! Panagiota

Terry Flood

August 8, 2021 at 2:45 AM

Glad that was fiction, Kim. Annie says I must have a clear conscience because I’m asleep as soon as my head hits the pillow. I sympathise with all the worlds insomniacs. Good luck in Line’s contest. Terry