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9/4/2024 for Trimeric, 2 Poetry Contest sponsored by Janice Cannerdy

Triumphant TRI

"To learn to fly, be not ashamed",
an ugly caterpillar said.
A slowly passing snail exclaimed,
"You make me laugh.  You've lost your head".

An ugly caterpillar said,
"I will be pretty by and by,
with colors that would make one sigh."

A slowly passing snail exclaimed,
"You're living in a fantasy, 
and slow and ugly, just like me."

"You make me laugh .  You've lost your head".
A pretty butterfly was heard
to purr and flutter like a bird.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 10/6/2024 2:11:00 PM
David, a huge CONGRATS on your well-deserved win in my contest. Absolutely delightful Janice
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David Crandall
Date: 10/6/2024 2:46:00 PM
Wow! Thanks for the praise and glad you liked it Janice!
Date: 9/5/2024 7:50:00 PM
I like it. You brought a butterfly to life in a clever, subtle way.
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David Crandall
Date: 9/8/2024 10:29:00 AM
Thanks Hilda
Date: 9/4/2024 9:40:00 AM
Ha-ha. Thanks for the laugh, David!
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David Crandall
Date: 9/4/2024 9:48:00 AM
I'm glad Marilene! I let my bias creep in, because my garden has snails and milkweeds which attract the monarch butterflies, and I will admit, I prefer the butterflies to the snails.
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