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9/4/2024 for Trimeric, 2 Poetry Contest sponsored by Janice Cannerdy

Triumphant TRI

"To learn to fly, be not ashamed",
an ugly caterpillar said.
A slowly passing snail exclaimed,
"You make me laugh.  You've lost your head".

An ugly caterpillar said,
"I will be pretty by and by,
with colors that would make one sigh."

A slowly passing snail exclaimed,
"You're living in a fantasy, 
and slow and ugly, just like me."

"You make me laugh .  You've lost your head".
A pretty butterfly was heard
to purr and flutter like a bird.
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Canerdy Avatar
October 6, 2024 at 2:11 PM
David, a huge CONGRATS on your well-deserved win in my contest. Absolutely delightful Janice
Crandall Avatar
October 6, 2024 at 2:46 PM
Wow! Thanks for the praise and glad you liked it Janice!
Greenhough Avatar
September 5, 2024 at 7:50 PM
I like it. You brought a butterfly to life in a clever, subtle way.
Crandall Avatar
September 8, 2024 at 10:29 AM
Thanks Hilda
Evans Avatar
September 4, 2024 at 9:40 AM
Ha-ha. Thanks for the laugh, David!
Crandall Avatar
September 4, 2024 at 9:48 AM
I'm glad Marilene! I let my bias creep in, because my garden has snails and milkweeds which attract the monarch butterflies, and I will admit, I prefer the butterflies to the snails.
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